When Night Stands on the Waters

Exhale your emotions

onto all of our memories

waxing as poetic candles,

rub your feelings all over me.

While vague unexpected hours

root deeply

and mingle inside all they see.

I can hear our laughter lingering

when night stands on the waters

of our love,

never growing tired or flickering.

Following close behind

the heels of my heart

never leaving..........

or wandering.

We have been given a life

that comes after midnight,

guiding us,

letting no poison command our faith.

I smile,

in knowing our love

will grow stronger,

as each day passes away.

Author's Note

Artist *Marcobusoni

Reviews

[cartera]

One is taken into the heart and mind of the narrator and kept there by use of visual images that 'talk' to the reader. Talk is not the correct expression, probably better to say the poem whispers to us as it takes to a memory and embellishes it.
ATB
Alex.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Cartera :)

[silent poet]

If only! ...... *my thoughts* Very beautiful Neva, your poetry always takes me away

[MadBubbles]

I love the scene you have painted with your words and I love the feel you've put in your words.
ITS AWSOME!

[Cassie]

This is so awesome. I love.

[KAREN]

Beautiful breathtaking words!
100/100

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you ! :)

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Quite beautiful. :-) I loved the way you expressed this part:
"I can hear our laughter lingering
when night stands on the waters
of our love,
never growing tired or flickering."

[RachelReaper]

How is it that every poem you put out deserves a standing ovation for describing love so beautifully? :) Great job with this poem, I think its literally impossible for you to write a poem that isn't wonderful.

[Eric Wagner]

As to be expected, always visceral and real your writing belies your feelings even if the words are not so defitionistic (yes I just made this word up)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Eric, I like your word :)

[Phantom Heart]

"We have been given a life
that comes after midnight"
Nice. I have a lot to say but can't find all the words. I am moved by your poem, I think that it is beautiful. Well done.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Morgan :)

[anxia]

Love how exceptionally you have twined the words!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Anxia :)

[None]

"Waxing as poetic candles"

Great. Bravo... Bravo...

Perfect Line-

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you POL :)