Dust Gathering on My Rhymes

I am suspended in a time that is lost

in the laughter

flowing from my lips.

And no one ever told me,

there is no way out of this.

I am past recognizing solid ground

and burning

from the memories I keep.

Still, my Muse sings a lullaby

while my destiny weeps.

Paper flowers litter the floorboard

of my heart

and go up in smoke inside my head.

I can't control

a single breath ahead.

My thoughts choose to stay inside the ink

where there's no risk

of living outside this time.

I can feel dust gathering...

on my rhymes.

Author's Note

Artist : Renso Castaneda

Reviews

[rivers]

metaphorical sleights of hand
dry onto the empty sheet of paper
as traces of past now’s…

miles of written reverie spun
like a spider reprocessing,
carefully savoring,
each fine silk thread of web
spinning the intricate "womb of time"...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Harlon :)

[Joel M Frye]

Understood, Neva...my beloved thinks I write "nice stuff".

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Bear :)

[WhiteWillow]

Sometimes the best poems are born of heartache. We, as readers, are treated to a beautiful piece of art, but hopefully your writing is cathartic and cleansing.

Thanks for sharing

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

It is. Thank you WhiteWillow. :)

[Leigh]

Im listening keep writing i love this and this is sucha good turn of phrase, I actually read it instantly as 'Dust Gathering On Me Rhymes' , which sounds more Olde English.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Amazing. "I can feel dust gathering...
on my rhymes." How did you think of it?
You're too good.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you Mehak. I will tell you how I thought of it by telling you what it means to me. When one has written poem after poem for someone and they feel they are not being heard.......dust is gathering on my rhymes.......

[Jack...]

Oh, they are being heard Dear Neva, just perhaps not by the desired set of ears.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

xoxoox

[Mehak Mushtaq]

I agree with Jack xD

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. I like the feel of real life and thoughts. Life can twist us up and leave us with questions of why and who? I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending.
"I can feel dust gathering...
on my rhymes."
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Coyote :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Serene and heartfelt sweet soulsister, Neva... I can see a lot now, about what we talked about, I feel with you in ever breathe on distance... your ending gives me real shivers... those shivers only you can bring. X

- Elisa

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you my sweet sister. I know you are very busy so I appreciate your visit. XO

[Emerald Seas]

Neva, you never cease to amaze me. Every time I read your work there is that moment when I'm reading where I feel you have looked right into the deepest part of my soul. There is a rich, deep substance to your work. This has been me on so many occasions of late. How I search for a path out. You have touched me there. May we both find a way to clear away the dust and begin to find brighter days. Beautiful and simply stunning in your craft.

[kayamon215]

i really like the flow of this :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Kayanon :)

[Zachary_James]

That was beautiful, every part of it! Stunning work!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Z :)