Dust Gathering on My Rhymes

I am suspended in a time that is lost

in the laughter

flowing from my lips.

And no one ever told me,

there is no way out of this.

I am past recognizing solid ground

and burning

from the memories I keep.

Still, my Muse sings a lullaby

while my destiny weeps.

Paper flowers litter the floorboard

of my heart

and go up in smoke inside my head.

I can't control

a single breath ahead.

My thoughts choose to stay inside the ink

where there's no risk

of living outside this time.

I can feel dust gathering...

on my rhymes.

Author's Note

Artist : Renso Castaneda

Reviews

[rivers]

metaphorical sleights of hand
dry onto the empty sheet of paper
as traces of past now’s…

miles of written reverie spun
like a spider reprocessing,
carefully savoring,
each fine silk thread of web
spinning the intricate "womb of time"...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Harlon :)

[Mark]

So sad, and a feeling of helplessness "while my destiny weeps'. I want to believe destinies can be changed. But it takes more than just faith. Great write Neva.

[redflutterby]

I'm awe inspired by your writing style. Achingly beautiful!! The artwork was perfect with this piece. ;-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"inside the ink/ where there is no risk"

like that

"i can feel dust gathering/ on my rhymes"

love that...

you have such a unique voice...and i feel out of breath After reading your work...it just slams into my gut.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Jacob :)

[Birdman313]

ahhhhh another fascinating poem ,,

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you birdman :)

[The Gero]

A powerful write - many thanks for sharing.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you The Gero :)

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

This is a bit more sad than the ones I'm used to reading from you, but you managed to make it as beautiful as any of the other ones. I think this is definitely a poet's poem, and I just loved it :-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Moody :)

[The_Breakdown]

Oh yes and the picture is absolutely perfect and amazing!

[The_Breakdown]

I loved it because my interpretation, reading from my point of view, would be that i am uncertain and almost scared of the future; it is easier for me to express my feelings through words and stories that are not directly about my feelings, but still reflect them in a way. I can really relate to this poem and it's hard for me to get across why i like it and how i interpret it, but i tried my best to explain! Sorry if it was confusing :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

not confusing at all. What we must remember is that poetry is personal. It is personal to the writer and the reader. It can mean one thing to the writer and a completely different thing to the reader. This is why you will never see me explain what my poetry is about. This is so I don't take away from the reader's personalization. Thank you so much.

[The_Breakdown]

you're welcome! and i totally agree with your line of thinking.

[Phantom Heart]

OMG. My favorite new poem that I have read! This is written so well. I want to tell you my favorite lines but I'd have to copy the whole poem in this review. So I'll do one...
"Paper flowers litter the floorboard of my heart"
Thanks for writing.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Morgan :)