Raining Silent Moisture

I wander through your thoughts

with eyes full of silent moisture

falling down on those walls

you blindly live behind.

I listen to the loneliest heartbeat

convincing your other half,

inner peace.........

has been found.

Planting seeds in your mind.

I wonder should I leave this place

never return to visit

your future full of pain,

or continue raining silent moisture every day.

These walls you live behind are a fortress

that drain my soul,

no matter how hard I try,

alone.....

I cannot make them dissipate.

Author's Note

*Image.........by Neva Flores

Reviews

[Bobbie Coelho]

I feel the last piece is very telling and very painful to read:
"I wonder should I leave this place
never return to visit
your future full of pain,
or continue raining silent moisture every day.
These walls you live behind are a fortress
that drain my soul,
no matter how hard I try,
alone.....
I cannot make them dissipate."

This moved me very much.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Bobbie :)

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

This is so sad :( A very sentimental write however and the language was perfectly chosen. I love this poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Lewis :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and powerful poetry. Tears mean we are alive. Good to have moisture and know pain and pleasure.
"I wonder should I leave this place
never return to visit
your future full of pain,"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Coyote :)

[Emerald Seas]

Lovely lines, Neva. Seems you're speaking of silence as well. I too, honed in on the line you highlighted under your title. Letting go is hard and letting go of someone you've tried to support through hardship can be even greater. Searching in ourselves for peace is the only real answer. A friend that is dealing with a similar situation asked yesterday, "when do you stop trying to reach someone that has shut you out?" My reply, "when you're at peace and no longer hear God's call in that relationship." Even God knows some people are not receptive to the people He lays in his/her path to be their for them. He will release the burden in time.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you so much for your wonderful review and your solid wisdom.

[emmajoy]

' I wander through your thoughts ~ with eyes full of silent moisture ~ falling down on those walls ~ you blindly live behind.. .. '

This is more than sad because it reads as if admitting defeat, having to move away from someone completely loved, being unable to gently break down that person's apparent withdrawal .. cause unknown to this reviewer but could be illness.

This comes from the heart.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Emma :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ending a relationship is hard, even if it has gone bad... a beautifully melancholy poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Rock and Roll :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome.