Raining Silent Moisture

I wander through your thoughts

with eyes full of silent moisture

falling down on those walls

you blindly live behind.

I listen to the loneliest heartbeat

convincing your other half,

inner peace.........

has been found.

Planting seeds in your mind.

I wonder should I leave this place

never return to visit

your future full of pain,

or continue raining silent moisture every day.

These walls you live behind are a fortress

that drain my soul,

no matter how hard I try,

alone.....

I cannot make them dissipate.

Author's Note

*Image.........by Neva Flores

Reviews

[Bobbie Coelho]

I feel the last piece is very telling and very painful to read:
"I wonder should I leave this place
never return to visit
your future full of pain,
or continue raining silent moisture every day.
These walls you live behind are a fortress
that drain my soul,
no matter how hard I try,
alone.....
I cannot make them dissipate."

This moved me very much.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Bobbie :)

[Lily Mae]

I saw the picture and smiled.. You are so beautiful..inside and out.. The poem itself then took me over. It's so powerful to me.. it has a gentle feel but holds tight to the heart.. The last line "alone....I cannot make them dissipate".. says it all..xo Another beauty Neva..xo

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Lily Mae :) XX

[sirenribbon@thehptshirt..]

Extremely sad poem right here...

[Enid Blake]

A very sad poem, but with a sense of selfless devotion underlying it - that place when you stand by somebody and you don't give up, even when all seems lost.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Enid :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Beautiful picture and beautiful poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you Ahmad. I don't generallly use pictures of myself but I had played with this particular one and it seemed appropriate for the write.

[Night]

...I too write of such things, but you do it so elegantly my friend...this was a very heartfelt write and made me feel many things...thank you.:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Night. If we all wrote the same what a boring world this would be. :)

[Night]

...true.:)

[bluessadmood]

this is lovely ,dreamy and so deep
how i wondered through your thoughts ,eyes tears ,they fall
how you blind me behind those walls you built,if i could reach you
and seed in your mind like piece ,from me,i tried so hard
shall i leave and never return,you drain me all
or shall i wait still some more..wish i knew
how dear and tender those words
lovely..

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you bluessadmood :)

[lee von cleef]

Twenty percent battery, red line not hardly fare to review, without time, Dissipate? strong sound to the end of this word.a little harsh on my ear, but that might be the point.I long for silent moisture,mine is falling in sheets on tin,trembling breaths to rock sleep ,warm 3/4's, cold shoulder and one foot,dare the night . Your soul is fine Neva, your heart? now that is another poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you

[MOON]

This is such a descriptive emotional write of the withdrawal of love and affection.the reluctance to leave someone evident , inability to change perhaps. Poignant write Neva , heartbreaking.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Dear Moon :)

[Frieda P]

Those inner voices can drive us mad, two sides of the coin are never in agreement with one another. I love the image, it compliments this piece so well. Beautifully written Neva.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Frieda :)

[Jack...]

I feel a broken heart, standing in the memories of what once was, but is to be no more. Should I remember and sit here silently weeping or should I move on, never to look back again.

Very sad but very nice, heartfelt and deep. Well done, Neva

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Jack :)