Raining Silent Moisture

I wander through your thoughts

with eyes full of silent moisture

falling down on those walls

you blindly live behind.

I listen to the loneliest heartbeat

convincing your other half,

inner peace.........

has been found.

Planting seeds in your mind.

I wonder should I leave this place

never return to visit

your future full of pain,

or continue raining silent moisture every day.

These walls you live behind are a fortress

that drain my soul,

no matter how hard I try,

alone.....

I cannot make them dissipate.

Author's Note

*Image.........by Neva Flores

Reviews

[Bobbie Coelho]

I feel the last piece is very telling and very painful to read:
"I wonder should I leave this place
never return to visit
your future full of pain,
or continue raining silent moisture every day.
These walls you live behind are a fortress
that drain my soul,
no matter how hard I try,
alone.....
I cannot make them dissipate."

This moved me very much.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Bobbie :)

[krish]

WOW........
LIKELY + LOVELY + ENJOYING = FULLY DESTROYING........
NICE WORDINGS.............

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Shivam :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

First of all, love the image, great work, love the poem as well.
My favorite lines:

These walls you live behind are a fortress
that drain my soul,
no matter how hard I try,
alone.....
I cannot make them dissipate.

I can certainly relate to this.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Becky :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

You portray sadness that is deep....it makes me reflect after reading it...

great talent...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Yas :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

" I never liked the rain until I walked through it with you" Clint Black

This was beautifully sad in a way that Byron can be beautifully sad...masterful and elegant. It's always a pleasure to read your words.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Fabian :)

[Michael G.]

This is unbelievably well penned. The flow to this is perfection.
We all put up walls of one sort or another. Working over, through, or breaking them down can be very difficult to do. You have expressed this very well.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Michael :)

[quinfinn]

i never walk away from a poem you have penned without feeling deeply moved in some way. you have a very rare gift , of which i am ever so jealous, because you touch everyone with your poetry. a very special heart beats within that bosom of yours, Neva.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Quinfinn :)

[quinfinn]

always welcome dear poetess!

[Pax]

how sad, no matter how you tried, the wall wouldn't cramble and dissipate... i guess its the hardest choice to achieve when love still present that never fades.
Great poem!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Pax. :)

[Ambereen]

Heartfelt and full of emotions ... well written !

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Ambereen :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Quite the piece, I don't know what else to say. The pain is heartfelt here. Rain like that is acid, eating away at your very core. Nice work, Neva.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Kenneth :) Good to see you

[Kenneth The Poet]

Good to see you too.