Raining Silent Moisture

I wander through your thoughts

with eyes full of silent moisture

falling down on those walls

you blindly live behind.

I listen to the loneliest heartbeat

convincing your other half,

inner peace.........

has been found.

Planting seeds in your mind.

I wonder should I leave this place

never return to visit

your future full of pain,

or continue raining silent moisture every day.

These walls you live behind are a fortress

that drain my soul,

no matter how hard I try,

alone.....

I cannot make them dissipate.

Author's Note

*Image.........by Neva Flores

Reviews

[Bobbie Coelho]

I feel the last piece is very telling and very painful to read:
"I wonder should I leave this place
never return to visit
your future full of pain,
or continue raining silent moisture every day.
These walls you live behind are a fortress
that drain my soul,
no matter how hard I try,
alone.....
I cannot make them dissipate."

This moved me very much.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Bobbie :)

[disheveledApathy]

"With eyes full of silent moisture/Falling down on those walls." This is a rare gem, one of the few I've found on this site, and I hope you write more like it.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Mercanta :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Beautifully sad but powerful write sister...

"I listen to the loneliest heartbeat
convincing your other half,
inner peace.........
has been found.
Planting seeds in your mind. "

Was just wonderful wording.
Very symbolic. Thanks dear.
And the image is stunning!

- Elisa

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you so much Sweet Sister ;)

[sithlordjp]

I read through this "silent moisture" as a quiet walk in a thick wall of mist. In this mist, we are alone, words and sounds are amplified in there, and just out of our grasp. I wanted to thank you for sharing these lovely words, they made me stop for a long moment, to think about what we are, in the silent moisture...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sithlordjp :)

[Phillitup]

no words to speak...stunning

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Philitup :)

[afra]

this is so beautiful .....i enjoyed it ..well done

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Afra :)

[Sami Khalil]

Our love can't dissipate behind the shadows of sadness but where it rains the most we feel its deluge where in our aloness we speak to the silence of walls that becomes a fortress to defend us from the threats of our past battles... A very emotive write full of deep reflections... I hope all is well or will be well...:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

Always welcome dear friend and brilliant lady...:)

[Leigh]

I love your very abstract style that offers you the perfect ability to cross boundaries between the real and theoretical worlds. This poem is very sad, but also has a very definite message, I hope you break through and reach the person you are seeking here.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Leigh :)

[cl8thegr8]

these words are from the heart. you can definitely tell by the time you reach the end of the poem. it's brilliant.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you :)

[Danielle]

Yours words elegantly sad....speaks to an old soul such as mine. Lovely words!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Shia :)

[Marie]

I find a strange thread of hope running through this sadness...as if some future will find the silent givng returned...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Marie :)