Unravel the Night

Unravel the night as it nods off

to become a wall of darkness

until the sun looks into your eyes

once again

and you feel the pain of truth.

Then tell me what is real

among the promises we have made

and why the blood running through our veins

speaks of us,

as our hearts are seduced.

How can we continue to live on the edge

where each breath we take

challenges our bodies to become

victoriously in control?

When our hearts' wish to speak

of the need to see each other's face

and how love's flame burns

within our eyes then moves

inward to the depth

of our souls.

Author's Note

Artist Liu Zhan

Reviews

[Emily]

I love the progression that you've captured in this piece- you start with a cute, children's bedtime type of feeling with innocent nighttime words like "nods." Then you grow up. You start playing with words like "seduced." I like it! It shows the agelessness of love. Thank you for sharing!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Emily :)

[Michael Stevens]

Excellent, excellent poem; and nice lyrics; nice song!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Michael :)

[Art Sun]

nice work Neva...when we reach deep within ourselves we find more than we sometimes understand...love is such a delicate emotion, it blends within our very Soul, and it can devastate the very heart and mind, but it is the Spirit that keeps us sane through all the turmoil of life...an exceptional work my friend...Merry Christmas...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Living life trying to take care of ourselves and looking out for loved ones becomes a tight rope and the balancing act is not easy.

[Larry Dyson]

"How can we continue to live on the edge

where each breath we take

challenges our bodies to become

victoriously in control? "like..it big time Neva!
unraveled I am as the prose says .. no control ..or less each day as My cancer progresses!..

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you so much dear Laury, try to truly live each day. XX

[fireblossom]

Lovely.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you fireblossom :)

[Lily Mae]

So powerful Neva.. "what is real among the promises we have made"... I think many hearts will connect with your write and that phrase alone..xo You always touch me with your words. Merry Christmas to a beautiful woman... inside and out..xo

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Lily Mae :)

[R J Askew]

How marvellous, prcarious, astonishing and fragile life is. And at the very top end of it we have life creative and talented poets, such as yourself, exploring life through beautiful language.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Orlando :)

[Lover Of Words]

I just love reading your work so good!!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Kelsey :)

[lee von cleef]

I like this thread, neat little spurs tinkle at the back of her boots,quite urging ,physical reminders, strength of souls,dapple under the hearts at play, no doubt about their trail,both ride the ridge line,busy gathering their lives in hand pointed to a meadow, a meadow they both need, though Hell bars the way.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you lee :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

spot on again.....It flowed like silk..I read it as an affair taking place..an uncertainty as well as an unwillingness to end it

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Dr Wood :)