Unravel the Night

Unravel the night as it nods off

to become a wall of darkness

until the sun looks into your eyes

once again

and you feel the pain of truth.

Then tell me what is real

among the promises we have made

and why the blood running through our veins

speaks of us,

as our hearts are seduced.

How can we continue to live on the edge

where each breath we take

challenges our bodies to become

victoriously in control?

When our hearts' wish to speak

of the need to see each other's face

and how love's flame burns

within our eyes then moves

inward to the depth

of our souls.

Author's Note

Artist Liu Zhan

Reviews

[Emily]

I love the progression that you've captured in this piece- you start with a cute, children's bedtime type of feeling with innocent nighttime words like "nods." Then you grow up. You start playing with words like "seduced." I like it! It shows the agelessness of love. Thank you for sharing!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Emily :)

[Veronica Chandler]

I am always mesmerized and transported to other places and times when I read your work. I think it is by your talent with building ideas, feelings and thoughts with your well crafted words. Always a Joy.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Veronica : :)

[Danielle]

Exquisite!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you :)

[krish]

nice.......

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Shivam :)

[Leigh]

This sounds like a battle of the heart and mind, love the title / opening line, very classy / classic

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Leigh :)

[Emerald Seas]

As you, I too "have been there"! This is full and deep, probing and thoughtful. Love fully felt, expressed, and experienced. I enjoy reading all your work. You have a way of expressing emotion in a variety of ways that, each time, speaks to me.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Que Sera Sera :)

[Lino Rie]

An interesting poem.

[Georgiana S]

I've read it three times and this part "How can we continue to live on the edge/ where each breath we take/ challenge our bodies to become/ victoriously in control?" spoke the most to me, control could be the enemy of our freedom to breathe, to feel, to love, to exist.. the whole piece is powerful, beautiful, deep.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you Georgiana :)

[FJ Davis]

Love fully mapped--on a scope and with an intensity unimaginable to most artists; certainly, unknown to most people.
If you have not "been there," sweet Neva, you have clearly closely approached.
I envy you.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you Frank ;) I have been there