You Never Knew Me

I truly thought
I had found myself
in a wondrous place
where you could truly see me,
and that all my words
were forever immortalized.
Held close.......
inside of your everything,
soft......as a breeze.

I laughed as you stared
into my eyes, asking my name.
With my heart in your hands
and the moonlight
at your beck and call.
Then......watching you walk away,
I smiled.......
even though I realized
you never knew me
at all.

Reviews

[kelvin]

like love at first sight so to speak falling for someone on sight as you first speak to them in a state of lost for love snapping back to reality seeing the things between you such as love and time shared was only a sense of inner thinking in ones self for he don't even know you to love you. as always keep writing fellow writer

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

thank you Kelvin :)

[kelvin]

You're welcome

[Pratik]

This is truly an elegant write... I love the way you express the tenderness of these moments with utmost care yet not revealing too much to render them ordinary.... The lost feelings when you discover that that the person closest to your heart doesn't know you at all can drive the world haywire... yet you express these feelings with a lot of calm and understanding that leaves the readers pondering.... Very well composed..

[Mark]

Your writing is going through a metamorphosis I think... Maturing. I love this one Neva, it's full of light with a little shadow and sadness. :)

[smurfett]

Beautiful write....such a longing in this.

[Enid Blake]

I love how you've placed the two perspectives opposite each other in a two verse poem. You lead us a little way to think one way, then force us to reconsider? I enjoyed reading it and thinking...

[lee von cleef]

condensed ,to a mental moments minituer eather ,stealing a kiss from each of us,then you are air,and a ocean fills in the coast left in your eather.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Neva this is a very poignant and 'observant' poem. It squeezes such a lot of concept and exploration into a few lines. Lovely and flows like melted chocolate!

[Zachary_James]

I loved every single line, your words are beautifully writen. You are a true and amazing poet.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

So much emotion and pain in these words. Nicely done.

[Leigh]

Berautiful words