Where Surrender is Found

Often a joining of eyes can be seen
underneath the moonlight,
drowning all your words
like a wave
that has crashed
on love's own ground.
Perception glances
off a fiery silence
until you ever so gently
slip outside of your skin,
surrender is found.

When you try and touch
that which you love,
sometimes empty wishes
are dropped on the coldest coast
until, you look around
see their sinking sand.
You dream of a home far away
find you are torn between the years,
with trembling fingertips
on your hands.

Can you remember the mystery
of the words “I love you”
when they are written
to someone who truly sees
how much you miss them?
Or do you find you are waiting
as a child
for something that comes only
when you sit alone
words pouring from your pen?

We were born on a day
when darkness got lost
while life opened up
spilled the glory of grace
into our spirits,
cradling us in its arms.
Here we discovered
truth lies on the ground
where clear-voiced flowers
sing the music of Mozart
inside an hourglass
safe from harm.

A joining of eyes can often be seen
underneath the moonlight,
two hearts that have traveled far
find a comforting silence
on love's own ground.
My eyes found yours
underneath the moonlight,
come into my arms
and find......
where surrender is found.

Author's Note

Artist: Jean-Paul Avisse

Reviews

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Only one who has experienced drowning in the look of love can write as eloquently as this. Indeed it is an overwhelming consuming passion that takes one to a glimpse of eternity and the flight to horizons beyond what the mind can perceive. Beautifully crafted love poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Cynthia :)

[Sourav]

So well written... love the way you've written it... lovely!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sourav :)

[Ironbutt]

yes ' inside an hour glass safe from harm', so perfectly penned.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you P. :) xox

[Letemdangle]

The challenge with your poetry is that it's like a puzzle I must solve, but I am too incompetent to solve it. But then again, if I dared, it be like decomposing a musical score for which I have no business messing with.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you L. so good to see you again.

[Mark]

"come into my arms
and find......
where surrender is found."

Truly wonderful as always, this poem wraps me in emotion and I feel hugged. :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

more hugs to you XXXXX

[Audrey Howitt]

We were born on a day
when darkness got lost
while life opened up
spilled the glory of grace
into our spirits,
cradling us in its arms.
Here we discovered
truth lies on the ground
where clear-voiced flowers
sing the music of Mozart
inside an hourglass
safe from harm.


Despite the pain that life can bring--you have captured the joy that love brings

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you so much Audrey :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Love this.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Ken :)

[Becky]

Wow.

This is... wonderful. Beautiful.

Honestly, I've read published works less eloquent than this. Marvelous job. You captured the emotion perfectly and expressed it in an elegant way.

100/100

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Marble Mountain :)

[ba_mcfarlane]

One sometimes finds great power in the act of surrender. One sometimes finds love. Or not. Of course, you already know this.
Your phrasing is past exquisite, I would not know where to begin. What a delicate and alluring piece is this. Every word fits just so. Seamless.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you B. :) X

[Eloha]

I really like the following lines:

where clear-voiced flowers
sing the music of Mozart
inside an hourglass
safe from harm.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Eloha :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

"until you ever so gently
slip outside of your skin,
surrender is found." You write so beautifully about surrender that it makes me wish I could.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you CAF/Shimmerbliss :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Your welcome! Claire