Just Sayin'

Here's a new one for you guys. I happen to really like it and it's message, so try not to be too critical.

When you think it's over it's not really over
When your down your really not out,
When life throws you a curve ball
You swing away,
This life we live is the lowest drudgery
Of all of existence.
But this maybe the only chance you have to live it
So make the best of it
Go for everything with all that you have
Never walk away thinking "If only...",
Always remember these words from a stranger
When life puts you on your butt
Get back up, dust yourself off, and give life the finger,
Because infallible spirit is the only way to stay sane
If you understood any of this then I thank you,
Because sometimes I wonder if I truly am alone,
And if anyone else out there can even begin to fathom the depths of my twisted and tired brain

You know just sayin'.
 

Reviews

[Nathan Strange]

Hey, I like this too, I believe the soul to be infinite and undefeatable, and this reality is probably the 'lowest drudgery'. I think Dante understood this when he wrote 'Inferno', life gets more challenging as you spiritually mature.

[Kate]

More optimistic, I see! Or, at least, more determined. I like this one, because you got in there, said what you needed to say, and was done.

[J. Hampton]

I enjoy the occasional write like this...
wherin a sincere wisdom is delivered in a casual yet not cavalier way.

Love the way you ended it.

Blesssssssssss

[M J Moore]

The overall message is good. But you know me, and I am a critical person. I just can't help it, so when I'm done with this bit here, I'm going to use the Notes feature and point out a few things...fair warning.

Overall, good message, as I said, but I think you can definitely work on how you get that message across. The art of subtlety. Play with the language, the phrasing... sometimes, when you hide your message a bit, the voice is louder, can be heard through the crowd. When you get bored at 2 AM tonight, scramble it up and see what you do to it. It doesn't have to make perfect sense.

mj