I hear your words dripping off your tongue. Stealing my thoughts and shutting them down. All I want is for you to leave. So I can stop feeling this grieve.
Honest and direct words shared my friend. You did well. Nice flow of thoughts led to strong ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
I can visualize this running thru a person's head when feeling stressed out, but not wanting to say it outloud . . . capturing it in a poem is a creative stress-relief! I don't believe rhymes have to be exact, so maybe "grief" as the last word would lend more to the meaning, while still maintaining a near-rhyme?!?!? Just a thought . . .
I'm not to keen on how the final word has been employed in it's present form Centipedle - it kind of trips me up.
Overall though, it's a great wee scream of a poem. I hope it helped.
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