Intimate

And in that night she started to realize.
Undressed to impress for so many years.
Those longing feelings had started to fade.
Replaced with a sense of disgust.

That night when she had disrobed for you.
Was the night she realized,
She no longer wanted you.
But getting rid of you was difficult.

She would never tell you though.
She'll leave without another word.
No matter how much you loved her.
She was disgusted with herself with you.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[barleygirl]

I can relate to this message in more than one way. First, there's the pole dancer or exotic dancer that's doing what she must do to pay the rent, finally becoming too disgusted about what she's done to attract this unwanted attention. But there's also the kind of friendship where one person reveals him/herself by opening up, but the other person seems to always be deflecting or hiding the truth about him/herself. Recently I've gotten disgusted with people in my life who never give when I've been giving & sharing myself for years. Your poem describes each scenario well. I especially love the last stanza where we just leave without a word becuz there's no way to explain & it's just a waste of energy to try.

[Kathrin S]

You capture a very specific feeling very well in this poem. The reader understands what this woman was feeling, and talking to the man involved makes it a lot more interesting.

I wasn't sure about the punctuation though. If you were writing a story, you wouldn't write: "That night when she had disrobed for you. Was the night she realized, She no longer wanted you." Wouldn't that be the same in a poem? Other than that detail, amazing job!

[Coyote Poetry]

Love and need. Balanced on a pen of a needle.
"She would never tell you though.
She'll leave without another word.
No matter how much you loved her.
She was disgusted with herself with you."
I liked the above lines. People do change. Most times for the worst. Sometime what we had is more worthy than what we shall gain. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the powerful poetry. Made me think tonight.
Coyote