The start of the end

Not everyone's favorite

Finally, I get to see my dreams come true

What a relief this is something new

Memories crawls infusing one's mind

Anger and hatred seems left behind

Smiling faces on every vision

Seeing life on every expression

Talking, eating, drinking, and unwind

Feels like everyone's seems so kind

Light feeling, I felt happy

Heavy feeling, I felt sorry

Displeasing as I feel

Loneliness and happiness, It seems so real

What an adventure it has been

Still do not know what does it mean

Fly in the air, I touch the sky

Gloominess embraces numbness subside

Author's Note

I'm still new. I'm looking forward to see your reviews. Thank you in advance!

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Life is an interesting journey. We grow, we change and the only constant is that the change is inevitable. Let us hope then, that the change will be for the better and apply our every effort to making that hope, a reality, not only for ourselves but for every other human being that we share this world with. I enjoyed your write and I look forward to reading more from you. F.

[Cenfreateu]

I'm really happy not because people were able to post reviews on my writing but also able to understand the meaning. Your reviews keeps me inspired to write more. Thank you very much!
Cen

[Troy Henson]

Lifes a busy journey indeed. We tend to lose control of the day to day antics and with that turmoil can set in. We live in hope as hope is a key driver in ensuring that we continue on, happily with a smile on our face but not just for you but for others as well. We are not alone in this life nor should we feel that we are.

[Ansal]

A very warm and refreshing read! Loved it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the hope and the energy of the poetry. You allowed the reader to understand. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John the Baptist]

Watch that gloominess inside, but don't struggle with it. Focus on the joy of the first part of the poem.

[JayG]

First, dump the italics. It's prettier by a bit, I suppose, but harder to read, and always go with easy-to-read.

One thing that needs to be addressed is that you're forcing the line to the needs of the rhyme, in places. and ignoring prosody. As an example, Stanza 1, line 1 has 5 feet, but S2L1, which should continue the structure of S1 has 4. And the number of feet in other lines isn't carried forward, either.

There's a lot to writing poetry that's not obvious, and other than the idea of rhyming, we learn nothing about it in our school days.

Remember, the purpose of school is to prepare us for the needs of our future employers, and other than greeting card companies, who need us to write poetry?

I have two suggestions that can make a huge difference. First, go to Amazon and look at the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. It's a great introduction to the structure of language as it relates to the poet.

Next, for poetry, in general, download Mary Oliver's, A Poetry Handbook. The site I link to below will provide a readable copy but no on a phone), though in the end, you'll probably want to buy a copy of your own.
https://yes-pdf.com/book/1596

So... not what you hoped to hear, I know, but the problem is, our own writing always works for us, because we have both intent and context guiding our perception. But...knowing that the problem exists puts you ahead of most who post poetry here, and, is the first step toward eliminating it.

Hang in there, and keep on writing.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/

[Lisasview]

First read of yours
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cenfreateu]

Thank you and I appreciate you reading my writing.
Cen,

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome. I am wondering why you sent me a friend request?
Lisa

[Cenfreateu]

Just want to make friends and your poems are so awesome. It's very interesting.
Cen

[Lisasview]

Oh so you have read my poems? How kind of you and I do appreciate that you read...but where are your reviews? I find reviews are very important..
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You have left behind all the disquieted memories, and now it seems that your dreams have come true in a different way: perhaps viewing it more realistically which means that not every moment is sunny, but you are more accepting of circumstances...you now appreciate and savor the changed that have come before you.
Nice work!
Best, B

[Cenfreateu]

That's very true. I'm greatful to you taking time to post a review on my writing. It means so much to me. It's making me want to write more. Thank you very much!

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome, keep writing!!
Best, B