The Writer, The Pen, The Ink

A quick poem that was done on a bit of a whim.

A writer's heart,
The pen, the ink.
The stories start;
As thoughts do link.

A flash of thought,
Whispers of a dream.
The tale unfolds
As ideas gleam.

Characters dance
Across the page.
The scenery breaks
As words do age.

Time, time; it moves so fast.
Thoughts are not built to last.

The writer's heart;
The pen and ink.
The words depart
No more to think.

The words are there,
But left to be.
No more to fare
Less so to see.

Author's Note

This poem was written in about the space of an hour - the last two stanzas don't feel right to me, but nothing I wrote seemed to quite fit, though for some reason I didn't feel I could leave it at the two line'd stanza.... thoughts and comments, as always, are much appreciated.

Reviews

[Maya Storm]

The flow is good.. You kept me reading without hesitation.. First poem I've read so far and I like.

Fav lines: "Characters dance
Across the page.
The scenery breaks
As words do age."

I really like the images you conjured with that.

[Vittoria]

Thankyou, Maya Storm! I'm so glad you liked it, especially that particular stanza, which had me irate a couple of times!! Thankyou for a lovely review!

Vittoria

[Brielle Cartny]

The rhyming scheme is gorgeous!

[Vittoria]

Thankyou, Brielle!

Vittoria

[Rtrt]

I'll think on this I feel the same way sometimes. Not exactly sure how to finish something you feel good about from the start. I thinks it's great, but I understand the feeling let me read it a couple times more and go from there. Thank you

[Vittoria]

Thankyou, for your kind words! Yes, it can be most irritating when you're half way through something but the ending just won't be written the way you want it to be (if that made sense?). Thankyou for your thoughts on the piece!

Vittoria

[Joel A Doetsch]

I love the pacing and the imagery. "Characters dance across the page" is exactly how I would describe it.

[Vittoria]

Thankyou! I was trying to describe how it feel when you literally can't envision the characters until you write them; I'm glad someone sees sense in my words! Thankyou for a wonderful review!

Vittoria

[Eloha]

How does it happen? That it jumps out of us! I like this topic very much.

Perhaps to write things down is a kind of processing, that helps us live.

[Vittoria]

Perhaps you're right; I'm certainly one of those that finds some odd sort (or perhaps not so odd!) of satisfaction to writing for the simple pleasure of it. Thankyou for your lovely review!

Vittoria

[Melody]

I think it's wonderful the way it is. The last two stanzas bring a sensible oddity to it. I'd keep them.
The rhythm and abab rhyme pattern are a great fit into the piece. You did a good job writing it. :)

[Vittoria]

What a fast review! Sensible oddity... I like the idea of that! Thankyou for your heartening words and kind review, Melody!

Vittoria

[Melody]

Lol. :) Well, it was right there when I got on and I was just like "Hey that sounds cool!" and so I read it and enjoyed it. Lol.
You're welcome. :)

[Vittoria]

I'm very happy you enjoyed it! I was a little hesitant writing it, let alone putting it up on here, but I'm glad I did :)!

[Melody]

Lol, as you should be happy! I hesitate a lot with any piece I put on any site. Afraid of what reviews I'll get and such...But oh well, I do it anyway. "Training for Publishing" I call it. Lol :)

[Vittoria]

"training for publishing"? Goodness, what a great way to look at it! Although if ever I see a publisher coming my way I may just start running out of fear lol! And you shouldn't hesitate; the few pieces of yours that I've read have been wonderful!

[Melody]

Lol. I'm always trying to find a positive outlook-if I don't then I hate whatever it is that I'm trying to find some positivity in. Like science! Lol.
I'm hoping I'll see a publisher come my way someday, until then- I'll keep writing. Although I guess publishers can be sort of scary...Lol.
>.< Thanks. :)