She was made from the sun

This poem is dedicated to Mia Kane. The poem is about how she saved me. She has become my life.

The shadows of the abyss drowns me

I've been sunk until indulgence is merely a toy

This beast if the only mother

but alas, the true love singes through the black

This grandiose hope feels like another reality

She's every star in my gaze of gorgeous warmth

She is the time bomb of all glorious healing

I believe the Lynx beautifully attack me at the right time

Her spellbinding love is my Yeshua-like strength

to rise above this society of crux

She breathes inside every single part of me

Which is why my soul is on the sun

Author's Note

Yeah, I understand that this is a short poem but I think short poems are best because they get to the point with out dragging out.

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

The length of a poem does not matter. It is the message and the writing that matters and you have shown me that you can make awesome poems. I really like this poem and I am glad that you have been saved by Mia Kane. She shows the world that humanity is not dead yet and becomes one of the suns that will shine in the heart of peoples. This poem is very well written and lacks no talent.

Good job :D

[Cody]

Thank you very much, matey. You know what you're talking about.

[Nightfeather]

No problem friend :)

[Sierra]

Very well written! The figurative language makes everything seem more clear, and really gets the point across/drives the point home. Great job!

[Kristen H]

I feel like the fact that the poem was short added even more to the message and purpose. It was beautifully written, and can't wait to read more of your work!

[Brittany Bostic]

The length I believe adds to the passion and emotions of the poem. if the poem was down at three lines or thirty five it was done. The message you shared here made me feel pretty as if someone beautiful was standing at the edge of a water line as the sunset sets for the last day on earth. Very nice poem, when they are meant for someone or dedicated to someone somehow they mean so much more. I felt that it was very real just by reading the first few lines.

[Aphy!]

True, I like short poems because they are so to the point! And I enjoyed reading this~ Well done Cody! This was amazing!

[1VJ]

Love the title and the sentiment follows suit in your skillful words, well done.

[Cody]

Thank you very much, madam.

[MelissaAndres]

Very nice. You did a good job here. I agree about short poems. Depending on what you need to say, longer is okay but sometimes short just gets your point across, right where it needs to be. I LOVE your very last line, 'Which is why my soul is on the sun'. Awesome job!

[Cody]

Thank you very much, madam.

[MelissaAndres]

You are very welcome!

[Sultrysoul]

I wish someone looked at me in such a way. Such a good poem.

[Cody]

Thank you, Sultry. We all have our human keys that'll unlock our souls and get us spiritually connected to the sun. You just got to follow the magnetic force.

[Sultrysoul]

Thank you very much

[Girl With A Pen]

Reading this gave me goose bumps! Such raw emotion put into beautiful words! Well done! I enjoyed this very much

[Cody]

Thank you, my child of Yeshua.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A profound piece of affectionate emotions!
Wordplay is awesome and smooth!
Really enjoyed reading this!!

[Cody]

Thank you so much.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome!

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You've shown us that all is not lost even when it feels we're beyond saving, there is light.
In someone, or something. Brevity can be powerful.

[Cody]

Thank you so much.