A Girl Like That

Not generally prone to Poetry - but here some is.

Throat burns with
acrid bile
rising from a rebellious stomach.
Shame-colored cheeks,
watering eyes
defeat her struggle for
self-possession.

Crumple the note
she wasn't "supposed" to see.
Abort their cruel intentions,
and toss it in the rubbish bin.
Deep breathes help the moment pass.

"They are wrong anyway,"
she tells herself.
Rough, hot hands which slide
across her skin in the dark
stifle her judgment.
"What do they know about it,
Petty b*****s in a self-righteous knot?"
she tells herself.

She is such a
S**T.
Nobody marries a girl like that.

The note thrown away,
not forgotten.

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

First paragraph:
A flaming example of disgust, guilt, regurgitation of
something sickening.
Second paragraph:
Anger, disgust and self recrimination. "She was`nt
supposed to see" sounds like a conspiracy discovered by
the writer an insult which she contains, but it is unsettling.
Third paragraph:
"They are wrong anyway,"
But, can she be sure ? Now the reader is heavily involved.
What is the secret ? The writer has handled this well, we can
only guess. Perhaps the conspirators have only triggered her guilt
and they may have no real knowledge of her wrong doing at all.
Fourth paragraph:
She is such a
S**T.
Nobody marries a girl like that.
This seems to be terrible guilt, stimulated by the discovery of
a conspiratorial note. The writer confides, but leaves just enough
untold to keep us wondering as we ride off into the sunset.
Fially, the note has been thrown away, but the damage has been
done. Life may never be the same.
I honestly like this poem, it demonstrates the author`s ability as a
talented writer and a worker of psychological mystery.
Also, the economy of words in this piece is attractive and practical.
Thanks for an interesting read.
My rate: 100% FAVORITE
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Flow]

I have to wonder how she felt about herself before she read the note. I think the vile feelings were more from what they wrote rather than what she really thinks of self. I would have to say that the writter of the note feared the woman. Still a very powerful writing one that produces thoughts and feelings!

[poddar kushal]

there is so much told beneath the musk of negetive words. the anger and desperate feelings and perhaps pride in being the different...

[Yvette Shaw]

Feelings of regret are often haunting. I like the flow of this, you did well for someone not prone to
poetry. You should explore that side of yourself more... well done

Yvette Shaw