My Secret

                     A smile uncast

                              A look unflung

                              A word unspoken

                              A tear dropping

                              A mouth opening

                              A sob escaping

        A heart breaking...

Reviews

[Chris]

Taken with the title, this touches with a sad simplicity.

[Catlen]

Thank you!

[Chris]

It does... the thought is of watching from the outside...caring but never risking... dreaming but never touching.

[Thaddius]

This is well organized and very concise. Cool concept of little descriptive phrases to add up to a heart breaking. If I were you I wouldn't spell it out in such giant letters, the heart break is implicit. And making it longer and more specific could help. Good effort

[Catlen]

Thanks for reading it.

[don't know]

short and to the point. i like this poem. keep up the good work.

[Catlen]

Thanks for reading it...

[WILDERNESS]

Just perfect ..................... beautiful poem................. loved it...........

[Catlen]

Thank you :))))

[Antoñyo]

Sounds to me like that first moment of realization...then comes the rush of emotion... captured.

You could follow up this piece.

Thanks for sharing

[Catlen]

Thank you for reading it :)))))))