Living hell

I sit here in this cool dark place , paralyzed with fear . I can hear the screeching ,the cries for help - but I can't move . To feel their trembling vibrating through the floor, the cold hands that sometimes grab my ankle- trying to pull me down with them , wanting my flesh roll down their throats

Reviews

[jvava]

A very interesting peice.
I like the fear factor; we all fear hell, and you captured that phobia perfectly, and described it magnificently. I enjoyed ready this short work alot.
The grammar could use a little work, but besides that I don't see much wrong.
Good job. Keep up the good and unique work!

[Cath]

Hey , feel free to leave a review . Could really use your help

[Cath]

Okay , it's quite a odd topic but that's what I choose . Enjoy!