you werent here

While you weren't here
I cried every night
A million tears fell
Still my heart wasn't right

While you weren't here
I gained some in age
Things just went on
And life turned a page

While you weren't here
A whole lot got changed
My life became different
My world rearranged

While you weren't here
I had to learn to be alone
To stand on my two feet
To make my own home
And oh how I wish that
Things could be different
That I could go back
To a time in the past

To a time before
You weren't here

Author's Note

this is about my friend that moved away....really took a place out of my heart....

Reviews

[Zoya]

really good poem....

[Justin]

Thank you very much

[Phillitup]

At first when I realized that this was a rhyming poem I didn't really think it would work but you have me amazed. You have true talent and the rhythm was very good. I love the flow and message, nicely penned.

[Rich Kolasa]

Your repetition of your title is effective and captures my attention. I think that you could definitely flesh out some of the thoughts and feelings in this poem to be a bit more enveloping, but there's potential to it.