Secret love and hidden memory

Someone today told me. Write a new poem. Here it is.

                         











 


















Secret love and hidden memory.

I saw her face today.
Made me wander back in time.
Each of us hold our Beatrice's near.
The writer holds on to memories like a drunkard holds on to his wine.

Do our memories become less with time?
Do innocent kisses and embraces of youth become sweeter with age?

Do dreams of beautiful brown eyed young woman leave your thoughts
and you become empty?

Can you escape the dance of long sweet kisses and yearning to touch
tender and warm flesh?

Age allowed us to ponder old memories.
Make us wished we held tighter and done more.

Beautiful faces dance in my head.
Old thoughts forgotten.
Rebirth to make me remember I loved a brown eye girl once.

                                     Coyote
                                     May2012

Author's Note

Any mistakes. Please assist a old Poet.

Reviews

[Liderien]

there is an s on "dances" third line from the bottom. it should either be danced or dance.

The line under the picture could be shortened to fit the poem better.
instead of
""The writer holds on to memories like a drunk holds on to his wine"
The writers hold to memories like a drunkard to his wine.

That is all my friend. Thank you sharing. It brings me great joy to read your writings.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

If anything, your memories seem to become richer and more vivid over time, as they come to life in your beautiful poetry. As always, I am moved and touched by your journey through life. Thank you for sharing, as ever. This piece shows a wonderful thought process about memories. You are very considerate.

[Humor Me]

"Age allowed us to ponder old memories.
Make us wished we held tighter and done more" nicely said

[Aehr]

the 'woman' in the seventh line from the top should be 'women'. otherwise, if you are writing for one woman, the sentence should be
'Do dreams of a beautiful brown eyed young woman leave your thoughts
and you become empty?'

Apart from that.. the poem is gorgeous.. It's so emotional.. Memories are beautiful... thank you for sharing.

[nicolettox]

your words strike hard.
thanks again for a beautiful poem.

[Southern Cross]

"Make us wished we held tighter and done more." Regrets only mean we have taken chances and lived life. A beautiful memory,written with soft intensity. Love never fades nor disappears. The very thoughts of it, give it immortality.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Memories can be a great friend when we are lonely. Memories are the most precious gift we have. very nice.

[Sandy Beach]

Beautiful piece here sir. Old memories are special and cannot be replaced completely, but ah yes, new memories are even better, and I am working on some new ones right now myself. Thank you

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Stunning write! Memories of plesant times can bring a soul comfort and peace! Excellent poem!

[KAREN]

Beautifully written heart felt poem. Nice imagery, memories are a great way to keep the people you love close.

[Eric Cox]

Nicely penned poem. We all have people we miss. Excellent write.