The blue eyed girl

A old poem with a rewrite from 1992. I found a book with loads of unpublished poetry. From 20 years ago. I was free and mad. I wish I had some of the madness today.

             













           










The blue eyed girl

"When you got nothing to lose.
Can't fall too far my friends."
I told a group of Poets outside the Monterey book store.

A blue eyed girl with hair of auburn stood her ground.
Told me. "Ain't over till the Devil open the door to hell for you."

She took my hand and we wandered to the wine and beer store.
Bought some good Canadian beer and  whiskey.
She was dressed in a long colorful summer dress. Allowing her tan shoulders
to be seen and appreciated.

She looked into my eyes and whispered. "The night is long. The star are bright. Time for two people to rewrite some history."

I laughed and held her hand tight as we walked to  Monterey Bay.
My mind was thinking.
"I want to be loved by the blue eyed girl.
Who gives me smiles and can make me laugh."

I listened to her stories. 21 years of life without fear. She spoke of escaping without her sanity many times. She told me. I wanted to test life and see what was real?

The blue eyes girl knew me. I read three times a week in the city of Monterey and Pacific Grove.. I liked drink and laughter. She knew my hunger wasn't to use her or run to another. I just wanted to wander with the blue eyed girl who danced by the light of the moon. Who could drink the whiskey and sing some song.

The blue eye girl lays in my arms. Told me. "Somebody must see the truth. The waste and the abuse. We must test the rules. Break down the barriers of lies that surround us. Don't listen to the hypocrites who cried in disappointment when the people found out the truth."

We drank and danced by the moon light. Ran the the empty beaches. We danced with the demons and the spirits needing our energy. We were not afraid for a moment.

I was told. Jesus would save me. Work till you die. Forget old dreams and focus on real life. I rather find alive spirits without no fear. Better to tell the world to f-off then fall down and beg.

We danced the dance of insanity. My blue eyes girl told me, "Time for some good living. Time for us to free climb every mountain we are near. Time for us to roll with the waves in the ocean. Time to find people not afraid of laughter and fun. Life is short. Better to trick the God's. Make them think we have no fear. Death will come. Better to run into hell then crawl into heaven."

The whiskey and beer cans we collected. Me and my blue eyed girl will wander to Big Surf. Daylight was coming. The powerful sun was rising from the east. I kissed and held my blue eyes girl. I made a secret wish for this time never to end. But I knew then.

Blues eyes girls and freedom are rare.


                          Coyote
                          1992

Author's Note

I found a old book I wrote wandering the coastline. A lot of memories and stories in the book. I hope you enjoy. Any mistakes please assist a old man. Never too old to learn.

Reviews

[Hachamecha]

That's pretty amazing. And it's cool that you found those :)
Fredom is rare, an it is best to be a stubborn b*****d than eat dirt to please others. Let's run to Hell, instead of crawling to Heaven!
sounds like a chant the young and stupid would use to do stupid stuff XD

[M.Babu]

I always enjoy the sort of adage form your work takes! there's so many lines of just tough love wisdom and unique phrasing that i cannot help but be drawn in! Like:

"Better to run into hell then crawl into heaven."

"Don't listen to the hypocrites who cried in disappointment when the people found out the truth."

"Ain't over till the Devil open the door to hell for you."

Coyote! You have had such a vast experiencing on life! I only wish that i can too see the things you have seen, done the things you have done and lived so freely the way you seem to have...it really is dam great of you to give us an insight into your life experiences and many overlook it's importance so i'll just THANK you again for all the wonderful tales and wisdom that you bestow on us continually through your work!

Thank for this wonderful piece Coyote!

~M.Babu~

[Mark]

Thanks Coyote

[Tate Morgan]

Nothing more beautiful than a young woman in bloom

[DalainaRenee]

You can tell this poem is more then a poem. It does tell a story and make you want to keep reading more to it!

[Hayley]

I love reading your work. The ending line sums it all up; And it is enjoyable to read something written in the past. You remember and take a new perspective on it.
Wonderful, wonderful poem!

[BlueDreams]

Beautiful write sir :-)

[jennifer little]

wonderful

[Barbara Walker]

First of all, I really liked this piece. It's descriptive as to place and emotions. Love the last 6 lines! You are a talented writer. Now, of course, you know how I edit for grammar, etc., so here goes:

First stanza- Drop the " 's" on Monterey. 's shows possession. 's only correct if someone named Monterey owns the store.

Second stanza- blue eyed girl. opens not open.

Third stanza- Canadian beer and whiskey. Drop the period after dress, add a semi colon (;)

Fourth stanza- The stars are bright or if there is only one star, the star is bright.

Fifth stanza- Drop the word "the" before Monterey Bay. blue eyed girl.

Sixth stanza- First sentence, should be "listened" (no quotes). ""I wanted to test life and see what was real." (No question mark, comma after "me".

Seventh stanza- blue eyed girl. Drop the period after "money), use semi-colon instead.

Eighth stanza- blue eyed girl. Comma after "me", not a period. The last sentence of this stanza, use "cried" and "found" or "cry" and "find".

Ninth stanza- okay.

Tenth stanza- okay.

Eleventh stanza- A comma after "told", not a period. "I would" or "I'd"....without "any" fear.

Twelfth stanza- blue eyed. Comma after "told", not a period. A semi-colon (;) after Gods (no apostrophe on Gods, you want to show plural, not possession.)

Thirteenth stanza- blue eyed. Drop the period after "end", add a comma after "but", drop the period after "then", add semi-colon, instead.

Fourteenth stanza- Use "are", not "were".

If I missed anything else, I apologize. It's late and my eyes are so tired!

Again, I want to say i liked this piece very much and you have much talent!

-eyepoetress

[Hello, Goodbye]

Great Poetic Expression.. The accompanied visual really promoted a good read experience.

[stellasautelle]

I love it... very well written. can't wait to read more of yours :)