Sad brown eyes

Love should bring joy. Not sadness.

                    

   

  

Sad brown eyes

A brown eye angel is crying in our bedroom for me.

In a turmoil of a kind love.

A paradise of burning emotion.

You can create a strange prison.

I held her too tightly.

I didn't hold her enough.

The fine line of giving and taking leave you confused.

Love held on by a few words won't last the night.

I try to speak softly and don't create a wall of hate.

When life's disappointments surround you.

Slow down and think.

I close my eyes.

Re-set my thoughts.

Allow the pain to evaporate into the night.

I told her "I love you since the first moment I looked into your brown eyes.."

We sat  together in a silence and  I held  her tightly.

I whispered. "Stop the fear and hate before the walls of love falls down forever.

In a nightmare  you  didn't love me. I was alone"

I fell to my knees and prayed at her feet.

"My only wish.

Please don't leave my life."

I open my eyes and my brown eye Angel embraced me.

She told me. "You are my first real love.

When you leave me. I will never be complete again."

I whispered "I love you and I need you.

Your love made a man running in circles find peace."

Sweet dreams can become nightmares.

A wise man is gentle with his wife and children.

Love bring love. Kindness bring kindness.

Some words should never be spoken.

For words can break a heart forever.

I will go to my brown eye angel and beg for forgiveness.

      Coyote

     October 1994

 

Author's Note

Any mistakes. Please assist.

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

The only mistakes I could find are simple grammar errors. Such as where you wrote, "When you leave me. I will never be complete again" as two seperate sentences, when it should be one seperated by a comma, because "when you leave me" is a dependent clause.
As for the poem itself, I loved the simplicity of the words yet the very deep meaning behind them. The emotion is evident. Thank you.

[Layla Anne Massaro]

A wonderfully said story. This is so beautiful. Amazing.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Once again, your emotions and sorrow are expressed nicely.

A few of the lines really struck me because of their pessimistic reality, such as:

"Some words should never be spoken.

For words can break a heart forever.

Sweet dreams can become nightmares."

Well done.

[savine allen aka breezy]

i love very good keep it comming

[Melinda Weber]

You are so talented, i feel grateful for your reviews, but the pleasure is all mine when i read your work!! =) I really loved this piece, deep and meaningful you know the right place to strike, then bring the reader to a whole new level. This poem gave me chills, thank you =)

[Reaper]

very haunting in a way. great job of expressing that

[?]

I agree, some words should never be spoken, I learned a long time ago how to bite my tongue. lol
Love the story in this

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Memories...how they haunt. The more emotional ones seem to haunt the most. This is outstanding, a very moving story.

[Star Wolf]

This is fantastic writing. A very sad heartbreaking tale with the chance to put things write. I really enjoyed reading this!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Another amazing story-telling poem...my favourite types....
and what a dedicated love...
great stiff :D

[Sbernie18]

really good, touching, and emotional. good work