Sad brown eyes

Love should bring joy. Not sadness.

                    

   

  

Sad brown eyes

A brown eye angel is crying in our bedroom for me.

In a turmoil of a kind love.

A paradise of burning emotion.

You can create a strange prison.

I held her too tightly.

I didn't hold her enough.

The fine line of giving and taking leave you confused.

Love held on by a few words won't last the night.

I try to speak softly and don't create a wall of hate.

When life's disappointments surround you.

Slow down and think.

I close my eyes.

Re-set my thoughts.

Allow the pain to evaporate into the night.

I told her "I love you since the first moment I looked into your brown eyes.."

We sat  together in a silence and  I held  her tightly.

I whispered. "Stop the fear and hate before the walls of love falls down forever.

In a nightmare  you  didn't love me. I was alone"

I fell to my knees and prayed at her feet.

"My only wish.

Please don't leave my life."

I open my eyes and my brown eye Angel embraced me.

She told me. "You are my first real love.

When you leave me. I will never be complete again."

I whispered "I love you and I need you.

Your love made a man running in circles find peace."

Sweet dreams can become nightmares.

A wise man is gentle with his wife and children.

Love bring love. Kindness bring kindness.

Some words should never be spoken.

For words can break a heart forever.

I will go to my brown eye angel and beg for forgiveness.

      Coyote

     October 1994

 

Author's Note

Any mistakes. Please assist.

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

The only mistakes I could find are simple grammar errors. Such as where you wrote, "When you leave me. I will never be complete again" as two seperate sentences, when it should be one seperated by a comma, because "when you leave me" is a dependent clause.
As for the poem itself, I loved the simplicity of the words yet the very deep meaning behind them. The emotion is evident. Thank you.

[Scandalous]

The woman in the picture is beautiful, but the way you describe her only does her justice. You have a beautiful soul. Always a pleasure to read what you have written!

~ Scandalous

[Huggy Bear]

Lovely Piece

[Art Sun]

nice work Coyote...each poem you write of love is filled with emotions that keep one within the character of the poem...nice

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Can't see any mistakes through my tears. Favorite lines, "Your love made a man running in circles find peace" and "A wise man is gentle with his wife and children" Absoulutely beautiful!

[P.S I Love You]

very nice, i enjoyed reading this beautiful piece. Continue writing
xoxoxo :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Grammatically a good edit would do this the world of good, however, no edit can make the tears go back in, or casue them sensless under thoguht, well done, good read.

[Heather D]

lovely lovely lovely! i quite enjoyed it! very emotional. as far as mistakes, i saw only small typos. great write :)

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I love this. It tells a story that leaves questions in the reader's mind, but the answers to them aren;t important. The point this poem gets across is one of a proper perspective--what is important? In the end, it's family and love; forsaking pride. I loved it, as usual!
KH

[Kenneth The Poet]

Excellent work for sure.

[tHe]

Wow. Extremely thoughtful and very creative.
Well done
tilda