Wounded Angel

  Wounded Angel


 My sad  friend.
Please smile for me.
Stay with me by the sea all night.


Your world has fell apart.
You don't know right from wrong.
Desperate acts had left you feeling
dirty and insulated from everyone.


Please take my hand.

Walk with a man who swims in s**t most
of his life.


Ain't no real Angels on this Earth.
Only us struggling to make amends.


We all must do things we are ashamed of.
World isn't clean anymore.
Not enough helping hands.


Ain't no pity for the people in plight today.
I know we get fatigue and humiliated to
believing we are worthless and destitute.


Broken Angel.
Please take my hand.
Walk with a contaminated man.
Jaded kisses and broken promises had
left me empty.
The not so sweet taste of life has turn me bitter.


The sad woman whisper.
"I'm a dumping ground for men
who want to use and abuse.
I don't mean much to no-one."


I  touch her face.
I tell her.
"We must ascend from the malingering hell.
Leave the one's who want you to beg for mercy."


"Ain't no easy road.
Sometime we must get up.
Tell the world to back away."


"Find a better path to be on.
Kinder  and better people."


Please my broken Angel walk with me.
Take my hand.
The new day is rising from the East.




           Coyote
            Oct1986

Author's Note

A old poem. I would appreciate any help. Never too old to learn.

Reviews

[Neville]

This is so amazingly powerful.. it is ragged, it is real and it is raw... When a man says it, like it is, it should come across as true... When a man is a poet, there should be no need to shout.. When a good man is a great poet, people listen and have no doubt... here is a good example that just goes to prove my point.... AGT's ...Neville

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Neville. You are very kind to me my friend.

[Neville]

I dig your attitude, style and originality, always have my friend and true N

[Valentine]

There are many people still today all over the world living in sad and bitter conditions. Some by their own making, others by no fault of their own. Some just need that helping hand. Valentine

[Coyote Poetry]

We all do. All of us need a kind word and friend near. Thank you for reading and the comment dear friend.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I love you sense of completed chaos, a trying piece that reads well, more descriptive imagery may lend to the impact, well done.

[Dakota]

"We must ascend from the malingering hell.
Leave the one's who want you to beg for mercy."

This reminds me of something I saw once that said "keep your chin up because there's those begging to see you fall." Greater meaning in your words though. Thank you for this piece.

[Katie]

Your world has fell apart
Your world has fallen apart (if there was no has you could use fell)

insulated
Probably meant isolated
Isolated: Having minimal contact or little in common with others
Insulated: To prevent the passage of heat, electricity, or sound into or out of, especially by surrounding with a nonconducting material.

Walk with a man who swims in s**t most
of his life.
swam not swims (present and past tense confusion)
Also this line breaks up the flow because it is so long.

I know we get fatigue and humiliated to
I know we get fatugued and humiliated in to

turn me bitter.
turned me bitter (past tense)

The sad woman whisper.
The sad woman whispered (past tense)

This reminds me of something else you have written about angels, but I can't remember which one. Overall a good poem, flow is a little choppy in some places but overall really good.

[Irena]

"Jaded kisses and broken promises had
left me empty."
You have a way with words... this poem is beautiful and so well worded
i love the above lines

[Zoe]

Please take my hand.
Walk with a man who swims in s**t most
of his life.

this gave me chills.

[beautiful disaster]

An amazing view into ones instincts and reality into what some see as an alternate universe.

[Andrew Wright]

There's nothing I could add to more complete this feeling you've portrayed... Thank you.

[Breezie Kae]

Wow. This is such a sweet poem. And it's true. It has a very intimate feel to it.