"A wish upon a star"
coyote poetry,
This has the forever hope of young love; the optimism that was given an end but the heart dosn't know. Beautiful imagery of a wailing, hurting soul left to regroup and heal. Teqeula is the substitute for the sweetness of kisses and acceptance which were though a given. You appear to of written this a while back but memories can feel like they happened today. I hope that your soul has healed and things in perspective. Wishing you continued satisfaction and inspiration in life and of course your writing craft.
blessings,
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you Kathy. Her name was Beatrice and I never felt sad. I knew. She was staying in Monterey for.. read moreThank you Kathy. Her name was Beatrice and I never felt sad. I knew. She was staying in Monterey for a short time. I appreciate the comment.
6 Years Ago
Coyote,
I appreciate hearing a little about this beautiful person and memory for you. It is s.. read moreCoyote,
I appreciate hearing a little about this beautiful person and memory for you. It is so touching, what can I say? I wish you beauty of heart.
Kathy
There is such a beautiful sadness expressed in your longing wish. Wonderfully spoken, you share the depth of your love through your words. I still wish on a star every night.
A sweet love can create a prison and a paradise---so true.Nice alliteration.This poems so raw.great :))
mistakes: "I knew when you set a wild animal free"="I knOw when you set a wild animal free"
"You told me once you love me more then life.."="You told me once you love me more thAn life.."
I like it. Feels bittersweet. There is a tone of happiness recalled and also heartbreak for a love lost. Imagery is good, too. I like how you name the beach and the area of Monterey. Having been there myself, it puts a vivid picture in my mind and also the cool breezes Monterey is famous for adds to the feel of heartbreak. Very nice :)
Hey your writings are always good. I like the style of this one. The tone was good through out. Not much I can see to change that has not already been said. Great job.
"A sweet love can create a prison and a paradise." great truth in this line. An honest poem, very hard to let go of a loved one when they have passed especially if the love was that deep, thanks for sharing.
Hi! Hope you are well. This piece of work expresses the solitary torture and quiet pain that one experiences when love is lost. Drowning your painful heart in tequila seems the appropriate way to comfort ones loneliness at first - but then the dreams of crazy desire for her love exposes itself again. This is so sad - but on the upside, very impressive work
We should all treasure love while we have it...I love the image of the wild animal being set free...of course they dont' come back, who wants to live a trapped life after experiencing past freedom. I think that sometimes we hold onto our love too tightly and end up losing it..as you said "A sweet love can create a prison and a paradise". You have a captivating writing style, you have made me think...
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