Bittersweet goodbye

Goodbyes are necessary. Need closure to all things.

    Bittersweet closure


"I walk up to her house.
I celebrated one year with this young woman.
In the comfort of her small apartment.
We learned passion and hate."


An angelic face answered the door.
She asked me. Why did I come?
She fell into my arms.


I was leaving the Army.
Three years in the beauty and elegance
of Germany was coming to the end.


I came for closure.
My beautiful Daniela took me to
heaven and hell.


We entwined two lives for a year.
Her beauty enchanted my heart.
We reached the pinnacle of passion.
A million sweet kisses and thousand
words of love.


Now she is crying.
Her new love is dead.
I whisper I didn't want anyone to die.


I go to the Army P.X.
I bring her favorite rum to her.
I Play her Leonard Cohen music.
I allow her to hold on to me.


Silence is necessary.
Sometimes words don't mean much.
They only swim in sadness.
Allow pain to do the fatal mercy
of killing off the last of your hope and joy.


A young woman broke my heart.
The elixir of sweet love has turned bittersweet.


Now forgiveness and kindness are all
we have left.


Sweet and beautiful Daniela
Asked did I come to save her?


I whispered I came to say goodbye the right way.
To tell her thank you.


Her blue eyes looked into mine.
Asking for what?
I condemn you to grief and damnation.


I kissed her forehead.
I told her.


The only offense would be if we don't try to love.
Breathtaking kisses;
the warmth of two bodies becoming one for a time;
nights of love and passion


Will always bring a smile.
When the body and mind are old.
Those stories won't ever leave the heart and dreams.


I sit and baby sit Daniela for three days.


I leave her with no words of love.


Just a bittersweet goodbye."


                      Coyote
                    July 1982 

Author's Note

The gift of love is a precious gift. The person who waste love will taste loneliness.

Reviews

[Morning Star]

Bittersweet goodbyes tent to leave invisible wounds in the heart
Yet it is better to have love and lost than not to have
Tasted the sweetness of the embrace of love
feel your heart beat as loud as the drums
Love is a gift that keeps on giving if we are lucky enough to receive that gift
We must guarded with our heart
Your words captured such a beautiful flow
Powerful Message within !!!

[Abdul Aziz]

Awesome poem! The honesty and simplicity of the words, grant it grandeur. I love the way you describe the little things in life that matter the most. This poem read like a waltz between two lovers, a bittersweet waltz. The emotions are very palpable.
I think Fabian G. Franklin has made all the necessary corrections to make this perfect.
Great job!

[Elizabeth]

Silence is necessary.
Sometime words don't mean much.
To swim in the sadness.
Allow the pain to do the fatal mercy
of killing off the last of your hope and joy

Those lines were the most beautiful and poignant. Sometimes, there are no words. Sometimes the only mercy really is in silence. This plays like a sad love song and leaves the reader with a wistful yearning. There are a few grammatical errors, and I concur with Fabian's edits. This is a beautiful piece.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"I walk up to her house.
I celebrated one year with this young woman.
In the comfort of her small apartment.
We learned passion and hate.


An angelic face answered the door.
She asked me. Why did I come?
She fell into my arms.


I was leaving the Army.
Three years in the beauty and elegance
of Germany was coming to the end.


I came for closure.
My beautiful Daniela took me to
heaven and hell.


We entwined two lives for a year.
Her beauty enchanted my heart.
We reached the pinnacle of passion.
A million sweet kisses and thousand
words of love.


Now she is crying.
Her new love is dead.
I whisper I didn't want anyone to die.


I go to the Army P.X.
I bring her favorite rum to her.
I Play her Leonard Cohen music.
I allow her to hold on to me.


Silence is necessary.
Sometimes words don't mean much.
They only swim in sadness.
Allow pain to do the fatal mercy
of killing off the last of your hope and joy.


A young woman broke my heart.
The elixir of sweet love has turned bittersweet.


Now forgiveness and kindness are all
we have left.


Sweet and beautiful Daniela
Asked did I come to save her?


I whispered I came to say goodbye the right way.
To tell her thank you.


Her blue eyes looked into mine.
Asking for what?
I condemn her to grief and damnation.


I kissed her forehead.
I told her.


The only offense would be if we don't try to love.
Breathtaking kisses;
the warmth of two bodies becoming one for a time;
nights of love and passion


Will always bring a smile.
When the body and mind are old.
Those stories won't ever leave the heart and dreams.


I sit and baby sit Daniela for three days.


I leave her with no words of love.


Just a bittersweet goodbye."



I think if you make these suggested corrections to your poem, it will read much better. The feeling of this is wonderful...I love it!

[Wicahpi]

Bittersweet indeed.
You've had experiences all over the world,
yet, it seems as though this particular person,
woman, really had an impact.
Unfortunately, as the song says,
"Time Marches On" but some of those important
memories never do.