Did I tell you?

A wise person is thankful for what he has.

Did I tell you?

I don't remember if I told you how beautiful you are.

I have allowed so many things to blind my eyes.

Allowing disappointment to steal my smile and laughter.

I know.

If you left me.

I would become lost again.

I have twisted up my life in useless dreams.

Victories seem so far away.

Now I know.

You are my  only sweet dream.

That  I  have  gathered in my time of living.

I want to tell you.

I love you more than my own life.

Without you.

I would have no purpose.

Your love for me is a blessing.

A gift to a man so thankful for you.

Thankful for a kind lady  that touched his life.

I love you.

                Coyote

Author's Note

We need to be thankful for the people who stay with us in the bad and the good times.

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Your words are beautiful truth Coyote. This poem is a jewel to put in the crown of your love. It matches her beauty, as the photo shows. Eloquent, lyrical, tender...a song to the person whose love must never be taken for granted...in good times and bad...”Did I tell you?” In this poem, you did. Superb!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[The Analog Kid]

Coyote,

Excellent heartfelt sentiment here. The poem has a sort of innocence to it. Nice write from the heart, brother.

Pat

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I am a firm believer in letting loved ones know how you feel everyday for tomorrow might be to late... simple direct words but those are the most sincere heart to heart... I hope that person got to read this.

This was amazing... and just plain beautiful. This is now in my favorites. You caught my attention on the first line. Gorgeous.
100/100

[zombiikillah666]

this was oh so pretty. i love it ! (:

[maddie marshall]

I don't know what true love is,
but if it compares to the way you put it,
I think I'd be willing to take any chances:)
Beautiful piece

[Saturn's Lover]

Very touching, thank you.

[Desert Dreamer]

It is easy to forget to say thanks to those that mean the most to us, the ones that are always there when we need them.

[J. Randall Dodd]

coyote,

this obviously a very deep and personal piece, as told by you author's note. i can appreciate the sentiment, and am personally moved by this. however, this poem is lacking in flow, in my opinion. in order to better this from a purely sentimental work, and into a truly great poem, some revisions are necessary. i will not totally rewrite this poem, because then it would be mine, and it is yours to mold. however, i do have a few suggestions off the top of my head below:

1. i would make all the stanzas two line stanzas, just move up the first line of stanza two to the second of stanza one. this will aide in consistency.

2. i feel you use the word "life" too much. use different words. be more descriptive in your feelings. this will help with the flow and with the "too sentimental" feel of this piece. if you try and expand on these base/universal emotions, and add more "personal" notes, the piece will ultimately become better.

3. try not to be cliched. the "angel" is nice, but a bit overdone. plus, why is she an angel? if you were a bit more descriptive of the scenarios, i might buy it more.

4. rhythm, rhythm, rhythm!! read the piece aloud, and you will see why it sounds more like a letter than a poem. it needs more flow. maybe some alliteration or internal rhyme, something. just try it, read it aloud, and make tweaks from there.

i want to say that i did appreciate this work. i'm definitely not trying to squash it, only hoping for it to be made better. keep writing and editing... later.

sincerely,
jr

[Ruth]

So true love!
This is beautifully expressed, being grateful to those who are in our lives, often is taken for granted!
Wonderful poem to express that
xx

[Iota]

Taking time to give thanks shows a humble and caring heart. Sometimes it is all a person needs to hear to help them continue their journey with you. How often has time stolen away these words, how often do couples never even talk anymore. It only takes a few minutes to tell someone that you love them. Excellent write.