Any error. Please advice me. I appreciate the help. One man or woman can do great things. Martin Luther King gave us hope and dream of love and peace. Thank you for reading.
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Germany in the 1940s held similar views and turned to an erratic and psychotic leader to manage it. This and other countries are doing the same today and will pay the same toll. I don't mean to preach, and yet this was foretold long ago... "terrible times will come. For men will be lovers of themselves, lovers of money, boastful, arrogant, abusive, disobedient to their parents, ungrateful, unholy, unloving, unforgiving, slanderous, without self-control, brutal, without love of good, traitorous, reckless, conceited, lovers of pleasure rather than lovers of God, having a form of godliness but denying its power." It's a sad world in which we live.
Posted 8 Months Ago
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8 Months Ago
I agree James. We are on the train ride to hell. This is a old poem with the same meaning today. I h.. read moreI agree James. We are on the train ride to hell. This is a old poem with the same meaning today. I have five grandchildren. I hope we leave something for them.
Hey Coyote, you have certainly written a complex and very powerful piece here for everyone to consider. Within what is essentially a gospel, you have incorporated many apt and emotive issues that hit home so very hard. Hunger and poverty are diseases that there are universal cures for, they just need addressing in the right way. As for guns well, have they really done any good in peace time? The great Martin Luther King, clearly had a dream and he wanted all to share it. Now then, having got all that off my chest. Not only did I enjoy considering these words but feel the need to say how amazed I was that you have shown the ability to write as though you are someone else entirely and that, is a skill and a half. Bravo....Neville
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Neville. This USA leader don't see the poor. Less taxes for the rich and make the poor bec.. read moreThank you Neville. This USA leader don't see the poor. Less taxes for the rich and make the poor become forgotten. Could cause a change. Hungry people are dangerous.
a lot of truth here... timeless in it's messages.. "race and religion mean nothing when you are hungry and homeless" dreams held hostage by leaders that forget their promises.. powerful in it's presentation.. the beginning is always a good place to begin.. I have no issue with grammar here nor do I see a need for editing..... in my opinion.. the impact of your piece would suffer with grammatical perfection and correctness of form...
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you dear friend. I appreciate the positive comment.
A very poignant piece. It's timing could not be more perfect. Well written. I do see a few errors. Since you asked for help, here are my suggestions:
"Soon we will will be isolated and lobotomy."
lobotomy should be lobotomized
"Need to remove our restrains."
restrains should be restraints
"Their filthy and bloody dreams must died."
died should be die
forthright is one word without hyphen
so-call should be changed to so-called in both places
"Men/Woman change Woman to Women (needs to be changed in both places)
"not gun and death" gun should be guns
" For sons and daughter killed and slaughtered for
the so-call good will of Evil men/woman." Make daughter plural. The last So-call should also be so-called, but I would suggest since you already used it once before this changing it to a synonym like purported which means the same thing to keep from being redundant, but that change would really your choice.
The gist of your message comes across loud and clear. Well done!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for the help my friend and I appreciate the comment.
My pleasure. I know you would do the same for me. :)
7 Years Ago
I don't know how anyone who learns English as a second language ever learns it! We have so many wor.. read moreI don't know how anyone who learns English as a second language ever learns it! We have so many words that sound the same, but are spelled different, and are spelled the same with different meanings! You write it very well! I notice this is an older piece. You have improved greatly since then, my friend. Keep up the great work. :)
So much poverty in a country that should be great in meeting every human need that live within the USA.I believe the goodness of life should be allowed for all mankind.Nicely expressed;-] Good words
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I pray daily for peace. For all the children.
"Poverty inflicts all with equality. Race and religion mean nothing. When you are hungry and homeless."-These are such profound lines, and so true. You have outdone yourself with this poem Coyote. I feel your words, especially now. "need to put the guns down"-all over the world. Masterful and passionate work, my friend.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Annette. I pray for peace daily. I don't want Grandchildren fighting wars.
Golden Free Thinking words of wisdom that should be heard and applied to each and every life in our land ... Sadly, they all sleep the slumber of apathetic complacency, feeding upon fodder of lies as Sheeple-People UN-cognizant or wise ... Excellent writing and an even more excellent and profound message ... !!!
As one who struggles to be a Free Thinker and to promote Free Thinking, personally, I believe this is the best overall piece of writing that I have read of yours ... Of course, my views may be biased by my Free Thinking ... LOL!
Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Marvin. I do appreciate your opinions and your words. Good to be a free-thinker and a word.. read moreThank you Marvin. I do appreciate your opinions and your words. Good to be a free-thinker and a word man.
Coyote,
you have found a voice in this poem. The very freedom we have here in the USA is the very platform which we stand with our own voices to be heard and explained. You have given your own wide esplanation with passion. Blessings Kathy
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Kathy for reading and the comment. was written on 2009. It is sad. World became more confu.. read moreThank you Kathy for reading and the comment. was written on 2009. It is sad. World became more confused.
An amazing piece, that sounds smooth yet powerful, simple but full of impact. But then again I guess the truth shall set you free ^^. I liked it a lot. ^^
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for reading. Old words. Still true today.
A Poet and writer who love to read and write.
My pleasure is reading about the bad and good in a life.
Also to honor the Poets/Writers of the past by reading their words.
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