The Coastline

In 1991, I drove from Michigan to California. I wrote this poem the day I saw the Ocean.

                        







 











The Coastline


I fell in love with her on a December morning.
I stop my truck and I was star struck at her beauty.
Her power.

I walk quickly to her.
She was dancing on the shore.

Nothing could equal her beauty.
I gazed in wonder for hours sitting on the sand.

How could I have not escape to her beauty before this day?

Now I walk up and down the shore.
Watching the waves.
The beauty of her be-witched my heart.

I knew when I left her.
I would yearn for her sight.
Never be complete till she was dancing my  feet again.

My love was the Pacific ocean.
The peaceful sea.

I wish to be with her today.

                 Coyote
               December 1992

Author's Note

A old poem brought out of my pile of old poetry. I love the ocean. Best days of my life was by the sea.

Reviews

[WhiteWillow]

I wrote a poem about the sea today, before discovering yours. I couldn't agree more. Being by the sea is one of the best, if not THE best, places on this earth. East coast, West coast, Carribean. All different, except for their individual beauty. I loved this piece, glad I found it!

[Sasha]

Great Poem! I love the way you've given the ocean a character of "her" own. !
I think there is 1 mistake, forgive me if it isn't'. In the 4th last line, i believe you meant sight.
Otherwise, Excellent Job!

[Terry Collett]

Yes, well captured. Ocean and a woman. I feel your admiration, your love for the sea. You relate these things well, Coyote.

[Ana]

Beautiful. Just lovely. The end gives you a little start and go, "Oh. Oh, yeah, I should have seen that before!" It's wonderful.

Thanks for sharing this :)

[Gabrielle Ash]

Asthetically, when I look at the poem and how each line breaks, it resembles waves to me, how tthey rickle along the shore and then pull out again. I'm not sure if that was intentional or not (or if what I'm saying makes logical sense), but it's a definite plus.
Pure eloquence. the last line is ver poignant. lovely poem

[r]

this is purely beautiful... nice work

[Kon™]

I love how you lead up the audience to thinking it was a woman or something of the sort, but ended up being the ocean. It was a pleasant surprise. Nice description in this piece, it makes me want to revisit the ocean :) Wonderful job!

[Jeannie Wilder]

mmm, beautiful Coyote. As an ocean-dweller I like this a lot. Personifying nature is always a great technique, it make it "touchable" for the reader. Well done :)
( as I'm sure you've been told already countless times!)

[Lilly]

This is so beautiful and such a peaceful, calm write. Love the imagery too.

[QuothCorvid]

Well written, I always love to read a peice and find out it isn't what I thought it was. Forces one to go back and re read. Well done! I to enjoy going back through and pulling things I have written in the past. You have me wanting to go and find my old note books!

[Revolutionary]

This is beautifull.I can feel the ocean dancing with my toes.I think you could add more lines to this and it would be even better.It is sweet though