Do a little soldier poetry myself ...fought the demons and the devil, walked the trail and waded the rivers, ...you stuff is good, Soldier stand alone. Cleans his M-16. Death is all around him. nice verse, working on some new stuff ....keep writing and posting
E Wells KY
Posted 12 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Hope you made it home Dear Soldier E.Leo Wells ! I send you a Thank you for your service for all of.. read moreHope you made it home Dear Soldier E.Leo Wells ! I send you a Thank you for your service for all of us.
And I send A Song of hope with my tears that Mankind will someday overcome the war machine and live together in Peace.
May someday the only war we make is the war cry for Peace.
I think we have to maintain that connection to the world of peace and beauty that once was ours and hope to rejoin again. Being a 20 year Navy man and Vietnam vet, I can tell you that I stood or floated somewhere on the other side of the world often and had those kind of thoughts. Nice writing, for certain.
this poem reminds me of the beauty in the world that brings us all, as the yogis of india, call a center. obviously i , a young buck not knowing war, can not relate to this poem but i find myself thinking of times where i myself have meditated to a moment or a face in order to bring a sense of calm, or serenity in an other wise chaotix situation. the simplicity however is some what im my opinion lacking something, i think it lies in lack of emotion. however war is emotionless do emotion might be controdictary, alothough i dont know how deep ur looking into the situation.
Everyone needs motivation, especially when they will be away for such a long time they need something to fight for... a really beautiful piece of writing.
That's a great poem!!
Soilder having a nice memory, I feel that he is pretty lucky, other soilder don't even have a chance to save a nice memory!
If the soilder dies, he probably die in love.
Good !
This is really beautiful and profound. I like how it's simply told, no frills - that makes it so immediate and sincere. The only thing I'd say is that sometimes you seemed to go from the third person (he) to the imperative. Also, towards the end, you write "He close his eyes." I think you forgot the "d" at the end of "close." But no matter - this was a really great and moving read.
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