Sometime in a life we must do the correct things to fix a problem.
Mother did not blink
(Abuser children and woman is not new. We must have open eyes and educate to stop the crime. Fear and pain hide in dark corners. It must come out and children/Woman must have safe places to go to be safe.)
Big sister came to me.
She was crying.
She told me Stepfather tried to touch her.
I got mad.
11 year boy anger can't do very much.
I went and told my Mother.
Mother was cooking.
I went to her.
I told her what happened.
She goes to my sister.
My Mother face is frozen.
Her eyes do not blink.
She told me to stay with sister.
She went to the kitchen.
I sat with my sister.
She is afraid.
I told her it will be OK.
I went to my Mother.
She has the tea pot on the burner.
She smiled at me..
Gave me a hug.
Kissed my forehead.
She told me to go to my room with my sister.
"If I hear a scream.
Stay in the room.
Don't come out."
She took the tea pot to my Stepfather.
We heard a scream.
The ambulance came and take my Stepfather to the hospital.
He told the police.
It was an accident.
He never tried to touch my sister again.
Mother smile.
Wrapped her arms around us.
"Whispers no-one will hurt my children."
This problem is more common than the word common. We as a society across the world tend to ignore and turn the other cheek to abuse of all types. That is how it is enabled to continue. Violence, sex, mental, physical. All of it is unacceptable, yet permitted? There is something that is, sadly, more wrong than the ones committing the crimes... us, society. Thank you for sharing such an important message, as all of your work is.
Well I suppose I will start with my grammar fixin'
Big sister come to me.
should be
Big sister comes to me
My Mother face is frozen.
Should be
My Mother's face is frozen.
Give me a hug.
Should be
Gives me a hug.
The ambulance came and take my Stepfather to the hospital.
Should be
The ambulance comes and takes my Stepfather to the hospital.
Mother smile.
Should be
Mother smiles.
Now one other mistake
You switched tenses once, which isn't strictly a grammar mistake which is why I am seperating it from those.
She smiled at me.
Should be
She smiles at me.
Erm one other technical comment and then I'm on to a real comment.
You end each line with a period you don't need to do this with poetry, it actually takes away from the flow of the poem. Punctuate it just like you would with a story, it will make it flow much better.
Now on to the content (always the more fun part, yet never my strong point lol)
I think this is quite possibly one of my favourite ones of yours I have read so far. Because it is a problem that hits close to home. Just not a father figure. It is an amazing poem. The protectiveness of a Mother is a sight to behold for sure. Great Job!
whoa, i already have a goosebump when i read at the end. im a mother myself, i will do anything to protect my child but even tho if they are not my children, no one deserve to be treated. great writing!
A Poet and writer who love to read and write.
My pleasure is reading about the bad and good in a life.
Also to honor the Poets/Writers of the past by reading their words.
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