Damn those eyes

Poem for a story

                       

                             Damn those eyes

My life had no beginning, no ending till I saw you. You were so beautiful.
You made the drink taste bitter and my hunger to die.
Forgotten.

Those kind and gentle brown eyes made me know some kind of peace.
I wanted only.
To have your eyes upon my face and to hear your words whispered to me in the darkness of the lonely night.

I asked you.
Are your my savior? Are you my siren to lead me to the dead seas of emotions?

I  told the Pacific.
Damn those eyes.
Damn her beautiful face.

I need you near.
I need you always.
Please my dear love.

Come with me.
Come with me to where lovers don't lie.
Come with me where we are true and free.

Beautiful eyes of golden brown whispered.
Damn your sweet words.
Your words like sweet candy and dangerous hurricane.
Make me want to taste your salty skin and for us to find the utopia of love .
Where we cannot return.

You made great promises and maybe I just bewitched you and I'm just a wish of myth and tale.
Where love promises fade to nothing in the morning light?

I looked at her and I whispered to her.
Damn those eyes.
I rather live and die in those eyes.
I will take the chance and
if you are my savior, my murderer.
I accept the final journey.

                           John Castellenas

Author's Note

Just words

Reviews

[AliceBarnes]

Words cannot express how beautifully written this was, I loved it! I honestly can't say that this could have flowed more nicely nor written any better. I loved that you used brown eyes, since brown eyes are seen as a bit boring compared to other colours its really nice to see that you used that colour. The length was very good too, I know that may sound rather weird, but I believe poems or chapters of books can become too short or too long to really grab a reader's interest - and this was just right, it left me feeling speechless with how good it was. I am going to have to add this to my favorites because I know I am going to want to read this again in the future. There is just something so captivating about the way you have written this, I adore you writers style. I particularly loved the lines "I told the Pacific. Damn those eyes. Damn her beautiful face." because, oh my goodness, the imagery was just spot on, it made me think of the sea and then of the brown eyes, and then of a women's beautiful face and it was just magical. I really liked how you ended the poem as well "I will take the chance and if you are my savior, my murderer. I accept the final journey." it was such a brilliant place to leave it because it made me realize that it was the end just by the wording, but it also ended on such a beautiful note that it really put the icing on the cake for me. I really look forward to reading more of your works in the future.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Alice. I appreciate the comment. You made my day.

[Ardra]

I looked at her and I whispered to her.
Damn those eyes.
I rather live and die in those eyes.

mmm wow... as always this leaves me wondering about the wonderful ladies... they must been on cloud 9 when you would have loved them :)

always beautiful...

[Coyote Poetry]

Once. Maybe. A long time ago. Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[AYVID N]

Such surrender I read in these beautiful lines. Indeed, what is to win or gain in this world but for such love and if there is a vaguest chance it can be ours, it is worth the risk! I just love the sentiments flowing from your pen here!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Divya. I appreciate the comment.

[AYVID N]

It is such a pleasure sir.

[andrew mitchell]

Eyes which induce in some hypnotic trance have the ability to distort rational thinking especially those willing to dive in for more. nice writing john

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree Andrew. Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[andrew mitchell]

But what a trip! Eyes to get lost in!

[Gee]

Entrusting our heart to another is the biggest step we ever take. If it is handled correctly and the act reciprocated it is the best feeling known to man, if not, well, I think many have been there.
Top writing Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you dear friend. I appreciate comment.

[Angie G]

You capture the moment where lustful eyes meet, and they recognize the hunger and desires burning within. Even if words are never spoken. Beautifully penned my friend. Happy writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Angie. I appreciate the comment. When we are close to the fire of wild passion. We won't fight to escape.

[Angie G]

Definitely not.. Life is but a whisper so every second must be lived to its fullest. Even if those eyes might mean our end...

[Poetic License]

By all the most scared heavens, that is simply gorgeous. I found myself sighing in satisfaction and longing both. Enthralled by the sentiment, its honesty... and aching to hear the same whispered to me. So well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

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As Romantic as ever, Coyote!

I too, have been lost in such eyes and used my words and soul to swim in them. The pool is deep and all encompassing. Sometimes those eyes that are so intoxicating, can also be dangerous, leaving us to drown when all is said and done.

This is another fine piece of Romantic realism; a genre that is your gift to all of us here on the Cafe.

Wonderful work, as always.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Doodley. I appreciate the comment.

[Mirror]

I love the title. It is the words i love to hear my man say, "Damn those eyes!"

I love this,

"
I looked at her and I whispered to her.
Damn those eyes.
I rather live and die in those eyes.
I will take the chance and
if you are my savior, my murderer.
I accept the final journey."

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading. Pretty and gentle eyes can steal our thoughts and sadness away.

[Mirror]

You're welcome, dear friend

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Romance writ large in a trusting breast exposed to all consequences Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes you are right my friend.. Thank you for reading and the comment.