Three short poems.

Attempt at less epic poetry.

                                Remember you, remember me.
The lights are low and the night is young.
Your perfect blue eyes welcomed my attention.
I kissed your tender ivory skin and I tasted the salt upon soft neck and shoulder.
You smiled a smile of modesty as you wrapped your arms around me in the ambrosia of love.

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                                  Longing

I recited poetry of love for you to strangers.
I told them how you wore  colored skirts upon warm sand and allowed the veil of the sea
to submerge me, to fall into your turbulence of your beautiful face.
I recited words of visions of a delicate woman who loved the sea.
I told the strangers of a beautiful muse who danced with the waves and she sang to the sun.

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                             Rapture

Pretty Katy whispered to me. We must die a thousand deaths before knowing the value of a new day.
She undressed for me, singing song of peace and love removing her clothing slowly.
Her concealed skin recedes to perfect valleys and rolling hills,
making me discard the past and I wanted us to become hopeless lovers wanting the perfect endings.

                    John Castellenas/Coyote

 

Author's Note

Just words

Reviews

[Gaia Octavia]

I say this all the time because it's true: I love grand thoughts wrapped in tiny poetry. I think short poems, when done well, are my favorite flavor of poetry because it forces/allows the author to boil down their thoughts and words to discover what exactly they need to share. The longing and the reverence ring true in all three of these. Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Gaia. I usually write epic poetry. I try to write short poetry.

[Gaia Octavia]

Did you enjoy it? I think it's more impressive that you went out of your comfort zoneand were able to bring forth three clear, honest pieces.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is hard. I'm a prose-type poem person, but I know. Need short poetry to attract some reader.

[h d e rushin]

I loved "longing". There the speaker describes not only how he felt, but how it felt to drag a vision thru
the power of likenesses (poetry). "longing" is about the theatre of love, where other actors appear and where
other bystanders roar with approval. In "longing" there is a protagonist and where there is a protagonist
there is action and observation.

Lovely threesome and very masterly written.........dana

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Dana. I appreciate the comment.

[K.]

I have missed your writing! I am happy to finally be back.

I really loved these three pieces. I love having three pieces that might not all necessarily be about the same person (or they are), but they all fit together with mystery thread in between them; and that is not easy to do. I loved this line: "her concealed skin recedes to perfect valleys and rolling hills." It just creates a nice visual while also showing the intimacy and appreciation between the two lovers.

I'm not saying you should change this at all but I think this one change might make the line flow a little bit more. In your second poem, the last line, I think deleting the "she" might make it flow better (I don't know if that made any sense but what I'm saying is change "I told the strangers of a beautiful muse who danced with the waves and she sang to the sun" to "I told the strangers of a beautiful muse who danced with the waves and sang to the sun").

This was a wonderful bunch of poems and I'm glad I got to glance on a little bit more of your writing! Have a great rest of your day!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Kassie for reading and the help. I do appreciate.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

All are romantic and tender. I have to admit that I love the second one "Longing" the best. The image of "I recited poetry of love for you to strangers. " says it all. Your use of names in your poetry gives them such an intimacy. Nice!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the kind words. Most of my poetry is from old places and memories. Names make the memory come alive.

[zunie frost]

I love it so romantic poem . nicely written
Keep it up

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you zunie. I appreciate the comment.

[zunie frost]

welcome my friend

[mou]

I have read your "Four short poem" and after this I like it too..
You have given a perfect subtitle above each three part and I like this style really just as "Four short poem" .
A beautiful vibration of emotion.....
Thanks for sharing this poem, my friend

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you mou for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Kat Mandu]

Darn good work my friend :D I don't usually like these sort of poems, but I found it really engaging. A pleasant surprise and an excellent poem. I particularly like the presentation, and I think the lack of video and photograph works alot better. Maybe that's just me though.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Hannah. I use the videos as muses. I need music and reading to keep my mind alive.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

You really painted with words with meaning that could be easily understood. ' We must die a thousand death' It struck. I love it. Well articulated.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you again. I appreciate your reading and your comments.

[Renée]

Three poems each a piece of the other..trickles downs like a gentle stream of water..into a pond of love..
Nice work Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Renée]

My pleasure to read ( :

[richieb]

Beautiful imagery that portrays the dream like mind set of love. The embraces and kissing that sets thoughts fluttering in lovers as they try to translate their impulses. Soft, gentle poetry.
Richie.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Richie for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.