I need a wild heart

Just words

      


                                  I need a wild heart



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                       Love made me live

Beautiful woman told me. We need to bathe in the quiet and sweetness of love.
Love come when love wants.
The movement of love is like a song.
The rhythmically song take us to interlacing of hands, mouth and body.
Let's dance  nude upon the balcony and allow our love story to be whispered to the stars and the moon.

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                              Your flesh remembered you

Old man Winter had made us escape to the dark rooms where lovers celebrate the night.
You teased me. Dancing nude to the Leonard Cohen songs and you fell to bend knees and
with beautiful face near. You whispered. "Your flesh remembered me and I will always remember you.
I wrapped my arms around you and I wish to drift forever into your eyes.
I told you. Love demands payment. I know my payment is loving and needing you till my last breathe.
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Author's Note

Just words

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Coyote, you know I adore your writing, as do most the other writers here who interact with you. I understand you do not want to start things by blocking people and taking their reviews down, but I don't think you should feel obligated to leave up rude reviews, especially when the person made sure it was long enough to stick as a featured review. Shameful. People may have their own opinions, but your work feels real and from the heart, and the style and simplicity are what makes it appealing. Anyone who doesn't see that is narrow minded and too rigid to see beauty in something that is not similar to what they themselves believe to be superior writing. Insults of other writers are not called for on this site. If you don't like something, just pass it by with grace and tact, and if you have true, constructive suggestions to help another writer, then do it quietly, and if necessary, behind the scenes.

[V]

I do abs agree with you. I have blocked this writer because of his weird and unkind review replies. We all have different styles and tastes, it's ok when one points out things to be changed that seem to be sort of disturbing or whatever about piece but I'd never put anyone down like this. If one doesn't like one's writings for any reasons, they should just stay away from it. I wouldn't even bother to leave a comment or review on writes I dislike.

[Lyn Anderson]

Exactly. There is no need to belittle others in this manner. It is hurtful and highly uncalled for. Read what you like, and review in a constructive way. It is not helpful to speak in general terms and call people down.

[V]

Yes, definitely.

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Another lovingly written poem, Coyote.

Like many of your poems, this one is written straight from the heart and born from knowledge and experience.
Stylish in its unconformity, this poem tells another beautiful story of love between a man and a woman, random or otherwise.
"Your flesh remembered me...." A great line.
Very nice work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Doodley. I appreciate the comment.

[Valentine]

Just words but very true words and thoughts. Valentine

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my kind friend. I appreciate your comment.

[TheRaven]

Noticed a few typos. 'rhythmically song' probably should have been 'rhythmical'. Or, 'rhythmic.' And, you needed to get the end quotation mark to finish "Your flesh remembered me and I will always remember you." Hey, we can't always be perfect with typos and things. Buuuutttt, we can get really close to it with the help of an editor's eyes. Just something to watch out for, you don't want the reader to get thrown off of the flow due to small mistakes. Does a disservice to your writing, ya' know? Oh. 'breathe' should have been 'breath' at the end I believe. :)

Anyway. I tend not to keep my lines extended out as far as you do because it feels like it stretches out a little bit too long. At least, for my tastes. You've got a host of people who enjoy your writing (and I enjoyed this as well). To me it may not be wholly original or something I haven't heard before, but the words feel genuine to me. Anyway. I quite enjoyed the song you posted, and it brought an extra life to your words. A vibe that drifted off the guitar strings that played in the background while I read. Got that lyrical, romantic nature to it. I could see this on an electric guitar, or perhaps more acoustic. I love the words 'Your flesh remembered you.' There's something blissful to that, resonating, even sensual. Where you showed your own flare to an oft-treaded topic was 'Dancing nude to the Leonard Cohen songs'. Way to paint a picture with that. Great way to involve me as a reader. Romantic heart, romantic voice. 'Your flesh remembered me.' Good sensuality to that. To me, this is a starting point to something really great. Scratch more past the surface, perhaps find less cliche words or metaphors. Many of us use cliches, so it's not an entirely huge deal. Keep writing what makes you happy, you'll find people who enjoy it. And perhaps find a way to cut these long lines and trim them down a bit into the lyric form you might find on a lyric site. Hell, some of this is probably just a few misspellings and grammatical issues. Enjoyed this, I'll be reading more.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the help. I do appreciate.

[Terry O'Leary]

A beautiful, passionate write, my Friend!
A wonderful read!
Terry

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Terry for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[matpat]

I like your poem a lot, beautiful.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Maddie for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Pryde Foltz]

A romantic and sensual write, Coyote. A beautiful escape from the mundane:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Pryde for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[V]

Sensual memories. Nice images. The title drew me in. Everybody needs a wild heart and a love like this to live it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree Vanessa. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[Lydia Shutter]

"We need to bathe in the quiet and sweetness of love" and when we do, how wonderful it is! Indeed, love moves rhythmically and is melodious like a song. Such seductive words, John. You are truly a romantic. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lydia for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Davidgeo]

The video up front distracts from everything you're trying to do.

This was a superficiality party. I can't be any kinder than I just was

Your closing line was borderline jibberish... that was not a coherent writing on any level.

You basically just string somewhat relevant words around a common idea. Nothing complex, I could give a ten year old this topic and a thesaurus, your poem is about what I'd expect. You tried though.... don't stop on my account.


Emmajoy... really? Block me... unblock me... block me..... what is wrong with you people? I'm not the devil.... I don't sink your review scores for fugs sake I rarely rate a poem or story unless you're insidious.

You cats can't take the 75/100? Gimmee a break.... enjoy mediocrity.. that's what all you spin your damn wheels in constantly.

This was all C+ writing....

[Coyote Poetry]

An C+. I do appreciate the comment. I like the video myself. Good songs make me write. This is my attempt to write less epic poetry. I'm learning and testing my skills. I'm here to learn and improve. This is a poetry site. Not a publishing company. I liked honest opinions and my skin is hard. Thank you for your time and your thoughts.

[Davidgeo]

You should always take pride in your work.... publishing or not, if something sucks why put it up at all? Not just typos and minor grammar stuff, I mean glaring flaws of nonsense and logical inconsistency should always be corrected. It's a pride thing. The world isn't a giant runway model platform yet I'm sure you don't go out with dirt on your face and meatball stains on your shirt. That's kind of a lame excuse "it's a poetry site not a publishing company"... and not at all accurate, it's a social media site that happens to focus on creative writing as it's hook.

[Coyote Poetry]

I do take pride in my work. I'm working to improve. Many kind people had helped me on this site. Writing is testing ground for our writing. I have told people often. Don't like my work. Don't read it. I don't leave response/comment to bad language, hate and foolishness. I will help someone if I can. This is social media and we need to be polite and kind. Private help to e-mail. Not to open media showing little respect and kindness. People, like me. I liked honest concern. I'm working on my weaknesses.

[Davidgeo]

I put pressure on you with the best intentions

[Coyote Poetry]

I do appreciate.