Let it be me

For Joey.

                          Let it be me


You are my old song, my new song. You are my place to rest sweet love.
I want to see your beautiful face everyday of my life.
I want to hold your body near and to hear you whisper.
I love you Johnnie.

I don't remember any bad days with you.
You made my hellish life seem sweet and okay.
I have lived and died in your smile and kind words.

You are my California dreaming.
My mountain top wishes.
My reasons to go forward, knowing.
I shall return to you.

I found you a long time ago and I asked you. Let it be me to keep you safe.
I didn't know. You would save me and you would give me reason to be alive.

I love you my dear love.

                           Coyote/John Castellenas

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[Bacchus]

I agree with Raven on this one-
the "let it be me"
sets the tone for this piece- without it it would have a whole different feel

you describe the saving and delight of this person-
but there is this gentle plea- "let it be me"

asking for the return

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Bacchus. I appreciate the comment.

[Willard Wells]

Very nice work with a very nice feel to it. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I wrote the poem for Joey. The female singer. She die of cancer three days ago. Thank you Willard for reading and the comment.

[Willard Wells]

Yes, I knew of her death and that, that was your intent.

[Coyote Poetry]

Not this one. Just using her beautiful voice to write poetry.

[Moonie]

Beautiful as always, sir! It fills the reader up with the warmth of love...excellently written!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[mou]

I don't remember any bad days with you.
You made my hellish life seem sweet and okay.
true feelings always use these words.It is the kindness of heart which keep only good times and memories of that special one.A very good poem with the scream of true heart.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you mou. I appreciate the comment.

[kanwal]

Each phrase has beautiful meaning Sir.
loved this line " didn't know. You would save me and you would give me reason to be alive"

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you kanwal. I appreciate the comment.

[hcarson]

very nice, good flow and description :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[leesa331]

I felt your love as I read this. I like the wording, simple and meaningful. My favorite line was "let it it be me to keep you safe". It says something everyone knows but in a different way.

[Coyote Poetry]

Both people need to feel safe and secure in the gift of love and friendship. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just beautiful words..."you are my California Dreaming"

and to live and die in someone else's smile....that in itself is a dream!

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Jacob. I agree. To fall into the kindness of woman smile. The perfect place.

[Érenn]

Just words you say? Well you should also add emotions are also in the mix. I liked it, each phrase is a build up to the strong love you show. The words flow smoothly, the flow excellent.
Well Anindita pointed out the same thing i was going to
I have lived and died in your smile' or " I have loved and will die in your smile" I think will just make it sound more powerful. Again just a suggestion ^^
Thank you for sharing ^^

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Errenn for reading and the help. I do appreciate.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Nice piece sir!!!
A nice flow of words along with emotions,, loved it..
Brilliant dedication, I wish someone would write such poem for me too...
'I have lived and died in your smile' sounds better than 'I have lived and die'.
It was just a suggestion,, pretty well penned...
Thanks for sharing..

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the help. I do appreciate.

[mattavelli]

This is beautiful. Each phrase adds weight, like a train of love. You come on strong. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.