Four short poems

Just words. Attempt at short poetry.

     Silence
The house is silence now.
The children have left.
The silence isn't golden my love.
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  Loveless

Once love was needy and was demanded nightly.
Now the bed seem larger and a lonely place.
Your once sparkling eyes shine lightly now.
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                                     Pretty lies are still lies

Mutual needs brought us together.
We were held on by desperate words and needs.
I don't see the need of eternal love in your tender and soft blue eyes.
In your eyes, I see the want to escape and depart our pretend paradise.
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                                Drink of me

Pretty woman whispered to me.
A pale moon light tonight and the sea is dancing peacefully.
Let's allow the shade of love to over take us.
Let's dance and sing to the yearning moon my love.


                            John Castellenas/Coyote

                                 

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

When we are accustomed to writing longer poems it may be difficult to "downsize" the words as I have found, but you have succeeded in doing a wonderful job of saying much in few words!
I like them all, but the last one, "Drink Of Me" is my favorite! "Silence" is one I can relate to.
Nice job John!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Silence is a lesson learn. When kids are gone. House become too quiet. Thank you Sheila for reading and the comment.

[M La Mellz]

wow! I'm amazed, well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Good work with these tidbits of a write...I liked the structure with the formation of this assemble...you weave them together and give the reader much to appreciate...

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Glen. I appreciate the comment.

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully collected and captured John. These four small snippets have feeling of the seasons of life bout them, all with a running theme of love and loving within them. Although all beautifully written, the first one, silence stands out to me, three lines encompassing so much within them, a life shared and the echoes of memories in the pace you call home, which seems all the bigger for those missing from the picture.
Really enjoyed these. Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Jaime S]

I'm glad to see that you are working with both poetry and story telling. I liked how these poems were so short but still told a story. That kind of reminds me of Ernest Hemingway and his one sentence story. After reading much of your work, I feel like you do better with lengthier poems. All of your poems make the reader really think and that's good!! My favorite was the last one, it's very powerful! I really enjoy reading your work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Jaime for reading and the kind words. I do appreciate.

[AE]

Very short, very sweet, very deep. Great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you AE. I appreciate the comment.

[Lyn Anderson]

I think you tied these four together tightly, maintaining the trademark to your style. Very nice. (second poem the seem needs an "s" on the end.

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. The poem are about different places. Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment.

[Lyn Anderson]

They still fit well together.

[E G TEN]

Hey CP, personally I prefers to write poems in midrange not too long, and not too short.
I believe that you preferred the same length, when I write something short I usually pack
Them up just as you did in this fine poetry. The third piece, ' Pretty lies are still lies' would
Be my pick of the four. Well done Sir, very cool, Thanks EG

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[emmajoy]

Whatever you write, long or short, love or stress, you always add a lot of heart, John.. and that's what makes your posts unique There's emotion and more in all four pieces, the silent stillness of the first, then the gradual fading of passion; so sad the third poem - short for sure but so full of... emptiness'. And then the fourth poem, bursting with veru real memories. If i reverse the order of the four, could so easily be life as a couple from meeting through time to the emptiness of... life, in a way.

Beautiful phrased. .

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Emmajoy. I appreciate the comment. I like to try new things. Short poetry is hard. Must pack a lot to make sense in so few words.

[Lydia Shutter]

1. When the nest is suddenly empty, it takes a long time to get used to the silence. 2. It's sad when a relationship filled with love and sexual activity suddenly becomes a sort of platonic one. 3. Ah, a pretend paradise...how many fool themselves into believing a relationship is more than it is? 4. When moonlight dances on the water, can love be far behind? I enjoyed all four of your poems, John. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lydia. I appreciate the comment.

[AYVID N]

All the verses are awesome. The 3rd verse to me was the most stunning. Much appreciated...Thanks for the lovely poems.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you DIVYA. I appreciate the comment.

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome.

[V]

Really differs from your other poems but in a good way. You did a good job shortening your thoughts and lines, it reads interesting and nice.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Vanessa. I'm trying to be less epic.

[V]

:D You're welcome. Whatever you feel like doing/writing.