Four short poems

Just words. Attempt at short poetry.

     Silence
The house is silence now.
The children have left.
The silence isn't golden my love.
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  Loveless

Once love was needy and was demanded nightly.
Now the bed seem larger and a lonely place.
Your once sparkling eyes shine lightly now.
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                                     Pretty lies are still lies

Mutual needs brought us together.
We were held on by desperate words and needs.
I don't see the need of eternal love in your tender and soft blue eyes.
In your eyes, I see the want to escape and depart our pretend paradise.
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                                Drink of me

Pretty woman whispered to me.
A pale moon light tonight and the sea is dancing peacefully.
Let's allow the shade of love to over take us.
Let's dance and sing to the yearning moon my love.


                            John Castellenas/Coyote

                                 

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

When we are accustomed to writing longer poems it may be difficult to "downsize" the words as I have found, but you have succeeded in doing a wonderful job of saying much in few words!
I like them all, but the last one, "Drink Of Me" is my favorite! "Silence" is one I can relate to.
Nice job John!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Silence is a lesson learn. When kids are gone. House become too quiet. Thank you Sheila for reading and the comment.

[M La Mellz]

wow! I'm amazed, well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Caddy]

Loveless got to me. So few words and such a huge impact.
Pretty Lies also feels like it sort of follows the same tone as Loveless. All lovely little pieces of art, but those two really struck me.
Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Caddy. I appreciate the comment.

[Mara]

Wow I really loved this, my favorites are silence and pretty lies are still lies

'In your eyes, I see the want to escape and depart our pretend paradise.'
This line is so beautiful and sad, I love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Tee for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Crimson_ish]

Silence and loveless spoke the loudest to me, short poems impressed with so many thoughts, it's the most difficult version of art and you've manage it splendidly. Really amazing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you. I appreciate the comment.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

I believe these poems somehow connect as if the person is writing of a day of his life. Obviously in a day alot of things happen that we think dont relate but in the end there is a thin string that pulls them all together. Good writig

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Luuucy]

"Loveless" really resonates with me, well written!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Luuucy for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Ruth]

Such love and reverence and the bittersweet to life moving on - the silence not being golden...beautifully woven :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Silence become lonely. Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

They are not just words. Short but powerful pieces that tells a story.
Glad you are trying something like this. I like minimalist poems. They speak much in just few lines.
Keep it up!

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard for me. The epic writer. I'm trying to write short poetry. Thank you Dhaye for reading and the comment.

[sonnie ibadah]

You are really talented, a few lines but speak a thousand emotions. i love 'pretty lies are still lies' well penned.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you sonnie. I appreciate the comment.

[mou]

in four poem, you focus on the value of each thing in an exact way.
"Four short poems" have a Big impact on mind.Very nicely written.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you mou. I appreciate the comment.

[mou]

You are welcome , my friend.

[Beccy]

All four are love poems and quite beautifully written. The first in particular, will strike a chord with so many whose children have flown.

For me, it will be some time yet before my miracle takes wing, and I will wish each and every moment until that time to be with me for the rest of my days.

Beccy.

[Coyote Poetry]

Old house become too quiet when children grow-up and find their own way into life. Thank you Beccy for reading and the comment. I spend all the time possible with grandchildren now. Time does move too quickly.