I adored you

Just words and beautiful photo

I ADORED YOU

December 29, 2015

 

 

 

 

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                    I adored you

I loved you near and afar.

I loved your soft voice and beautiful face.

I stood near you and we held hands and shared drink.

We traveled California One and I watched your dance

on the quiet beaches.

We found private places where you laid bare and free.

I could see a woman I beloved in silence .

But my need for you.

You never felt.

Because I didn’t show you, who I was

All I wanted was you,

Near but far away.

Today I’m alone without you.

And you,

so far away from me.

Today my only  wish,

is that I told you I adored you.

John Castellenas/Coyote

 

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[softlyfall]

First of all, I LOVE that ring she wears in the photo, double rings, chained in a handcuff allusion, devotion complete.
I see you sitting rapt on the sunset-gilded beach, watching her dance as if time slowed down and the moment was eternal. Too often we think it is, and never speak the moment out loud, then regret it when laughing time speeds back up and it is too late.
This is what I read/heard/understood and this I loved.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. Some people. Even not touched or known. Their energy for life make you wish for wild dance and song.

[Yurie Lee]

Awwww so sad (in a good way). Though, I feel that if you put a little more detail into this, like using some kind of imagery or something, this would be so much more powerful. Just food for thought, and well done~

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Yurie for reading and the kind words.

[An owl on the moon]

So beautifully painful to read, of your loving and wanting, yet such love fading away. And how many of us lose love in our silences, and our disguises, keeping our true affection hidden. Powerfully sad.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend. I appreciate the comment.

[katy B]

A beautiful enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Katy. I appreciate the kind word.

[hardeep sabharwal]

A powerful work with apt words, I like the way you expressed feelings here, nice work to read

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you hardeep. I appreciate the comment.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

the way you described her and how you met her is simple but powerful enough to make me feel how much you adored and long for her and i felt i was there, that moment when you were with her...

100/100

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Jas for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Dark Tower]

A beautifully written piece John. The pictures of such beauty help to imagine the pain of watching such as her disappear.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Thank you my friend for reading and the comment.

[Girl With A Pen]

Wow very powerful. Love is so difficult. You can love and be loved, you be loved and not love in return, but it hurts a lot more when you love someone who no longer loves you or never knew how you felt. I love reading your poems. They always have wisdom and strength poured into each emotional stanza. Thanks for sharing

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you. I appreciate the comment.

[A hare off]

I hope she gets the message, this was serenely beautiful and heart touching. Love sure can paint gorgeous words.

[Coyote Poetry]

Too late and far away. Now just wishes and dream left behind. Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Willard Wells]

Excellent work my friend. A true beauty to hold your love when near and be a loving memory as you wait for the chance to hold her close again. Very nice.

[Coyote Poetry]

We must and thank you Willard for reading and the comment.

[Philip Muls]

Hi John. Beautiful pictures.

Authentic piece of writing. I like the opening of I loved you near and afar.

Longing screams from your poem. Also sadness and regret.

Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Philip for reading and the comment. Sadness leave us with good poetry.