I adored you

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I ADORED YOU

December 29, 2015

 

 

 

 

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                    I adored you

I loved you near and afar.

I loved your soft voice and beautiful face.

I stood near you and we held hands and shared drink.

We traveled California One and I watched your dance

on the quiet beaches.

We found private places where you laid bare and free.

I could see a woman I beloved in silence .

But my need for you.

You never felt.

Because I didn’t show you, who I was

All I wanted was you,

Near but far away.

Today I’m alone without you.

And you,

so far away from me.

Today my only  wish,

is that I told you I adored you.

John Castellenas/Coyote

 

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[softlyfall]

First of all, I LOVE that ring she wears in the photo, double rings, chained in a handcuff allusion, devotion complete.
I see you sitting rapt on the sunset-gilded beach, watching her dance as if time slowed down and the moment was eternal. Too often we think it is, and never speak the moment out loud, then regret it when laughing time speeds back up and it is too late.
This is what I read/heard/understood and this I loved.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. Some people. Even not touched or known. Their energy for life make you wish for wild dance and song.

[~Sarah~ Idríel T..]

Beautiful work, John.

Love and longing touch the reader deeply.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Sarah. This young woman is a belly dancer to hard rock. My muse for writing.

[~Sarah~ Idríel The Fair]

Every writer should have their own muse for writing. =)

[Simran Kewlani]

This is beautiful. The picture you painted with your words is so vivid. i felt like I was right there. You must have written this for someone you dearly loved, because it was pretty descriptive.
Sorry I was away for so long. I'll be reading your stuff now. Hope you're doing great! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Simran. I appreciate the comment.

[Mary Helda]

So painful and yet beautiful...it is painful to lose someone that you love

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes it is and thank you for reading and the comment.

[Mary Helda]

you are welcome:-)

[Troy Henson]

Moving piece that touches some heart strings. To love is hard and even harder when one does not know of our true feelings. How can love be reciprocated based on the unknown. Letting go is hard. When love is this strong thought and memories never die making this all the more difficult.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and thank you Troy for reading and the comment.

[rhymeaway]

It's very difficult to tell the person how you feel, but what is scarier is them never knowing. Great write!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right. Most of us wished we had said more to a special person. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[My Favorite Writer !]

Wow! so beautiful and moving I can totally feel the love and longing.
They say "It takes seconds to fall in love, but takes forever to fall out of it".
- MFW

[Coyote Poetry]

The quote is correct. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[Cyndy Robinson]

This poem brought tears to my eyes. Very well written!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Cyndy. I appreciate the comment.

[Raahi]

That's just great writing. love always is an awesome thing and your words are putting it in a right way. this poem gives a feel about love that's unconditional, love that doesn't demand anything, love that's eternal. its also has a lesson that sometimes giving up and moving on is the best thing that can be done.
thanks for sharing such a beautiful work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Raahi for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

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John, this is a beautifully painful piece of poetry. You have such a subtle, softly romantic, style. Often heart breaking, but you find the music of it all, and write it to us in poetic story lines :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lynn. Good song and beautiful muses give us reasons to write.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Amazing piece of work. Love is flowing all through your words. Why dont yoy say her? Express your feelings to her with your above poem & she can't step a back I am sure....Thanks for sharing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Too late now. 23 years ago. But for the people who love to write. We need to test life, have fun, love often and travel. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Ohh okay. Yes you're right my friend :)