I left Iraq in the Winter of 1992. I was sent to Fort Dix, New Jersey. I
took a leave after I arrived in the USA and I drove my truck to the
base from Virginia. I was given a job in supply. I was a numbers man and
the Army used my time wisely. I re-enlisted for the war to
escape the suicide of two brothers. I believed I was seeking a good
death. War taught me that life was okay. You can't fix every problem or
situation. Just listen and be kind. I had a lot of time to travel. I was
waiting for orders and the military wasn't very quick. My boss was a
twenty five year Veteran. The Sergeant First class released me early
every Friday. I would drive down highway 95 to the city of New York. I
never aimed at the city. Somehow I landed in the arms of New York weekly
for two months.
Somehow I seem to land on the same
streets and end-up in the same taverns. I remember the long streets.
They felt ghostly and friendly to me. I found my destination. Chumley
tavern on Bedford street. The watering hole for the great
Hemingway. This was point one for me. I decided on 10 locations to visit.
I stood outside the tavern and I looked at the lights of New York. The
city had the ancient lived in feel.
I liked the
Chumley tavern. My G.I Joe haircut and northern accent allowed me to be
set out in the mist of the New Yorkers drinking, talking and enjoying
their night, drinking their gin and tonic. I wasn't looking for
conversation or friendship. I was in the city where Cohen and Joplin had
great talks. I was sitting in the bar where Hemingway drank and lived
his way. I felt like I belonged.
I ordered a cold draft and shot
of Jack. I watched the New Yorkers talk, laugh and drink. I caught the
attention of a pretty woman in a business suit. She was in her late twenties,
wore glasses and her long auburn hair tied tightly. She was
surveying my face and haircut. She came and sat near me. She touched my
shoulder and she asked. Did you just return from the war? I smiled and I
told her yes. She was silent for a few seconds and she asked me. Are
you okay? I told her. I'm okay and thank you for asking. She touched my
high and tight haircut gently and she told me. My brother came back and
he isn't alright. He is locked-up now. I told her I was sorry. War can
be hard on men. Hard to forget. She asked me. Is your head cold? These
are the cold days of Winter in New York. I told her. I'm Michigan born
and I'm used to the coldness of the Winter.
She smiled and
laughed. I liked her smile and laughter. I knew she didn't laugh too
much. Her eyes held a sadness. She asked me. What are you doing in New
York? I remember her brown eyes looking deep into my eyes. I told her I
left Fort
Dix and was searching for the watering hole of Hemingway. The lights of
New York and the place where Joplin and Cohen had their last talk. I
needed the ancient city. The city make me feel okay. She held her smile
for a few seconds than laughed. You missed 10 good cities to come here.
Of all the damned places to go, you picked New York in the coldness of
winter. She looked serious for a minute and she asked me. Where are you
going to park your car? This is New York. No parking in the daytime
soldier. I told her. I don't know. I just wanted a large city tonight.
No larger than New York. She laughed at my answers and her business suit
seemed less dangerous. Now her eyes were more gentle and less fearful.
She
told me. You are lucky. I have a empty spot to park your car. She asked
me what my name was. I told her, my name is Johnnie, wandering soldier,
and asked her name in return. She smiled and offered her hand and she
told me her name was Dorothy. A Boston girl working in the city. I liked
her face. A Irish
shaped face with a firm body. She asked me, "Do you have a place to
stay?
New York city is very costly." I told her I was going to escape the
city after the bar closed, find a cheap hotel outside the city. She sat
quietly for a few moments and she asked me, "Are you dangerous?" I
smiled
and I told her only to whiskey bottles and cans of beer.
She told me, "I
live near by. 201st Street. You can have my couch. I don't work till
Monday. I will give you a grand tour of the city." I told her, "You don't
have to. You have been very kind already. Talking with me. I do
appreciate. I don't want to be a added burden to you." She told me, " I
like your face. You have a good face. Please tell me a story. Why a good
man would volunteer for war? And how you landed here in this tavern
with me?"II I told her about my two brothers who committed suicide and how I volunteered
for war. War was very kind. Taught me life is better than death. Now I
need a story my kind friend. She smiled and she told me she went to
college and got her degree. "Now I'm a accountant for a big bank and I
work 70 hours a week and I'm always tired." I reached my hand to her and I
told her. Glad to meet you Dorothy.
She took my hand and she held
it firmly. I looked into her brown eyes and I asked her. Do you like to
dance? She smiled and told me. I haven't danced since college. I would
enjoy some dancing. I told her. Drinking need dancing and dancing need
drinking. We left the Chumley tavern at closing time. The city was still
alive and lit up. A lot of people were aiming at their nightly goals.
We found my truck and she directed me to the parking structure. She
found my writing journals and she read them as I parked the truck. She
asked me with questioning eyes. Are you a writer? You didn't tell me you
like to write. I do also. I told her. They are just journals now. One
day I will post and create the great novel. She looked sad and she
questioned me. I shouldn't have looked at the journals? I'm sorry. I
told her. It is okay. My life isn't so exciting. I use the journals to
release pain, anger and joy.
Her apartment was nice. The
apartment had the feel of a woman with good taste and class. Her bedroom
door was open. I saw large pillows and satin sheets. She had a small
couch and a small kitchen. The house was decorated simple. She had no
extra items. A Television and small stereo sat on a small table. She had
new art and waterfall on her walls. I liked her already. She had a
small book shelf. She had my favorites. Kosinski, Jack London, Stephen
King and Robert Schuller. I told her. I like your apartment. She smiled
and she told me. I like the simple things. I could be a little tunnel
visions with my needs. I like things in their proper place.
I
found her cassettes. I requested a Cat Steven tape. She put the
cassette in. The good drink made me braver. I reached to her and I
requested a dance? She smiled and she told me. Never danced with a
Northern boy. Are you Northern boys safe? I brought her into my arms
and we slow danced to the calm voice of Cat Steven. I felt her relaxing
and feeling safer. I released her and I told her. Dear Dorothy, I'm tired
and I would be thankful for blanket and pillow. I 'm very thankful for
her kindness. She held silence and whispered. Thank you Johnnie. We will
drink coffee at 9 am and I will take to the Chelsea Hotel tomorrow. She
came to me and kissed both my face-cheeks and she went looking for the
blankets. She left me wishing for more.
I went to the couch and I
was asleep very quickly. She came back and she put the blanket over my
tired body. She kissed my forehead and she went to bed.
Very honest feeling. It has a very poetic feel to it, which is supported by the choppy short sentences. Usually the flow of the sentence structure may leave a piece feeling choppy, but in this case I feel it enhances the character and how the character views the world, and adds to that poetic feel. TINY tiny note, it's Cat Stevens, not Cat Steven. :) Love the work, I really enjoy your style of writing. :)
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for your help. This is a real story. Real life teaches us and become our goldmine of memor.. read moreThank you for your help. This is a real story. Real life teaches us and become our goldmine of memories when you become old like me.
Very honest feeling. It has a very poetic feel to it, which is supported by the choppy short sentences. Usually the flow of the sentence structure may leave a piece feeling choppy, but in this case I feel it enhances the character and how the character views the world, and adds to that poetic feel. TINY tiny note, it's Cat Stevens, not Cat Steven. :) Love the work, I really enjoy your style of writing. :)
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for your help. This is a real story. Real life teaches us and become our goldmine of memor.. read moreThank you for your help. This is a real story. Real life teaches us and become our goldmine of memories when you become old like me.
First things first, try not to start every sentence with "I" when writing in first person, the first paragraph is an example of that, it's repetitive, unless you were going for that for some reason as a literary technique i dont know maybe im too young to understand that but thats what I see and I didn't like it. Some grammar mistakes like I think you used mist when you meant midst and the word choice can be improved as well. You did a good job of getting the right tone, if I were you I'd just keep reading through it and making little improvements, it has potential to be an 8/10 but right now id say 6/10 which is good and I've never read a story like this so I don't know how reliable I am and I don't feel like the targeted audience.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for the help and the honest opinion. I do appreciate.
Wow... The story held me from the very start. It was like reading a diary where the writer has plainly noted the events with his true feelings. Despite the simple and direct flow, it is full of captivating imagery. Emotive in all sense.
The heaviness doesn't wear off even till the end but naturally soothes to some extent. Life is harsh and this piece testifies the same.
I am very happy I read this, Sir.
Thank you.
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8 Years Ago
Read till the ending. Both me and Dorthy learn life can be okay. This is a true story. We find what .. read moreRead till the ending. Both me and Dorthy learn life can be okay. This is a true story. We find what we need when we are at our worst. Thank you Jyoti for reading and the comment.
A good solid story with interesting people and realistic dialogue. I could feel the melancholy and loneliness of your characters. Your story shows the search for answers in the mysteries of life that seem just beyond our reach. Very enjoyable read.
Richie.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Richie for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.
WOW! I love this! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get to this! I was drawn in & totally absorbed into your story from start to finish. You have a gentleness to your storytelling that is most seductive & interesting. I love the way you've included a ton of little details to show us yourself & your new friend. I could relate to the way things went, back a few years, when one might feel safe bringing a stranger home for the night. The feeling of trust is flowing thru-out your encounter. I know I've said this before, but this is the best writing of yours I've run across so far. I love the way you reveal so much about yourself & your life & your views about life.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you my friend. This is a rare story I had finished.
she asked me, "Are you dangerous?" I smiled and I told her only to whiskey bottles and cans of beer."
bwahahah. Great story. thank you for the kind reviews. Are you still stationed?
-Oregon
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8 Years Ago
I left the Army in 2000. At home in Michigan now. Thank you for reading and the comment. I do apprec.. read moreI left the Army in 2000. At home in Michigan now. Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.
Funny the old memories that creep in when we start thinking of something new to write. Without the past writers have little to fall back on. Valentine
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You are right my friend. Memories are the gold of the writer. Thank you for reading. This is one of .. read moreYou are right my friend. Memories are the gold of the writer. Thank you for reading. This is one of the few stories I have finished.
Nice story. I did enjoyed. It inspired me to write about my personal experiences especially in my journeys.
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This is good. Our experiences are the best background for our story and poetry. Thank you for readi.. read moreThis is good. Our experiences are the best background for our story and poetry. Thank you for reading the comment.
I really enjoyed your story, thank you for sharing. This is a very different take on NYC than my own, and from what I gather it is a true story?
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Yes it is a true story. I loved New York. The old city held mystery and beauty. Thank you Stella for.. read moreYes it is a true story. I loved New York. The old city held mystery and beauty. Thank you Stella for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.
8 Years Ago
You are welcome, it was a lovely story and cool that it is a true one.
8 Years Ago
I wrote the ending Wednesday. Was a hard story to write.
Personal stories are usually the toughest.
"There is no greater agony than bearing an untold .. read morePersonal stories are usually the toughest.
"There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you."--Maya Angelou
A Poet and writer who love to read and write.
My pleasure is reading about the bad and good in a life.
Also to honor the Poets/Writers of the past by reading their words.
Remember .. more..