Aarh, you couldn't take losing her again. That pulls at my heart strings. At first I thought this poem was too long and too detailed, a bit like a write in a diary. Then I read it again and it grew on me. Do you know it was like you had made a video. I thought it was a very visual effective poem!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
The wisdom of the heart must be listen to. If your heart tell you. You are dancing on fire and if yo.. read moreThe wisdom of the heart must be listen to. If your heart tell you. You are dancing on fire and if you stay. You will burn. Best not to look back. Thank you for reading and the comment.
11 Years Ago
Yes, our heart tells us when we love but it also tells us when to move on!
I really felt your emotion here, hard to say good byes, especially to ones we love. Yet he didn't want to go through a heart break again, thank you for sharing :)
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11 Years Ago
You are correct. Don't want to repeat the same mistake twice. Thank you for reading and the comment.
Nice. I really love the sentiments and the way you set the mood. I can almost see that blue light that comes in winter mornings as I read this.
There were a couple little things that I am pretty sure were errors, that you may want to look at:
"I see in her face. The joy in your eyes to have me with her. "- I think the "your" was meant to be "her"- or "my" because otherwise that is a strange and singular turn in who you are addressing with this poem.
" I should of turn back and never allowed her to leave my life."- "of" should be "have" "turn"-turned?.. or actually it would make way more sense just to take the of out: I should turn back and never allow her to leave my life.- you know to match up the tenses and stuff.
A powerful write here. Sometimes love is just not enough. Seeing someone you cared so deeply for years ago and realizing how many years have passed....so bittersweet! Not just the damned road tore you apart though.....it was not meant to be. Beautifully written. lydi**
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11 Years Ago
Your words are true. Somethings are not support to happen. Thank you for reading and the comment.
While the idea of being together with an old love may sound romantic, there are things and/or relationships that are not meant to be. Very poignant write.
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11 Years Ago
You are right. Rarely does second chances work. Thank you for reading and the comment.
This is touching. I can see it like in a movie or in a tv drama series...that damn road- it made you meet again.
This is splendid, CP. The person who broke your heart is still the one who fixed it.
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11 Years Ago
Sort of. Some people have bad timing. Love take two people with the same desire on the same path. Ha.. read moreSort of. Some people have bad timing. Love take two people with the same desire on the same path. Hard to do. We tried three times. Now she is only a pleasure memory. Thank you for reading and the comment.
No, No ,no Is this based on real life? If not it is areal work of art..
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11 Years Ago
Based on real life. It happen 25 years ago. Feels like a fiction poem today. Thank you for reading a.. read moreBased on real life. It happen 25 years ago. Feels like a fiction poem today. Thank you for reading and the comment.
11 Years Ago
I will tell you when I first read it I thought it was based on real life. It doesnt feel like fictio.. read moreI will tell you when I first read it I thought it was based on real life. It doesnt feel like fiction to me at all.It feel like you relived the moment. Aw man why men throw away sound love..
A very sad tale indeed. Sometimes we can go back but find that nothing is as it was. Things change. People change. And sadly, we sometimes make decisions after its too late to follow through on them. Excellent poem.
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11 Years Ago
You are right. Life is taking chances and making mistakes. Most of us wished we did things different.. read moreYou are right. Life is taking chances and making mistakes. Most of us wished we did things differently in the past. Thank you reading and the comment.
A Poet and writer who love to read and write.
My pleasure is reading about the bad and good in a life.
Also to honor the Poets/Writers of the past by reading their words.
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