The Angels don't cry for me.

A very old poem. I learn you can't be forgiven. Just to live with the foolishness.

The Angels don' cry for me.

The kind Angels don't cry or pray for a man with no conscious.

They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy.

I sat by the Monterey Bay wishing to be somewhere else.

I was haunted by mistakes.

My greed for flesh and money had  left me alone and desperate.

The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.

I wished upon the first star.

For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.

Then I remembered I was the foolish man  who left her.

Left her with tears in her beautiful brown eyes.

Her haunting words are a part of me now." Please stay." If I left her.

No-one would ever love me again."

 I sat drowning in self pity and anger.

Wished a fool's dream.

To go back in time and hold on.

Angels don't forgive the cold and heartless men.

Men who drain young flesh and leave them for dead.

I found her once.

My brown eyed girl came to me.

She put her arms around me.

Whispered "I forgive you. Please take care of yourself."

She walked away with a true love hand in hand.

I saw she found joy in a man who knew he held a real diamond.

I drank my tequila alone and told the world to back off by the Seaside ocean.

I fell into the sea.

Trying to feel some kind of emotion.

I finally cried  tears for breaking a sweet woman heart.

I sat and waited for the sun to rise from the east.

Not knowing if a man could be forgiven for deeds done without heart or conscious?

I pray to the Gods of the sea, the sky and the earth for forgiveness.

I tossed the tequila down. I walked the cold and lonely beach.

The kind Angels are crying for me now.

They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love.

I sat by the sea wet,cold and understanding.

Love is the most beautiful and sweetest gift.

 When a sweet woman open up her heart and soul to you.

Hold on to her tightly.

Give long and sweet kisses.

Don't let go.

                                    Coyote

                                  Sept 1992

Author's Note

A re-write. I'm thankful for the help I received on this site. My writing had improved. Thank you kind writers.

Reviews

[UnendingOceans]

Rule 17: Omit needless words (from the Elements of Style by Strunk and White). I point this out because I think this would be a stronger poem if you remove the underbrush that serves no purpose. Get rid of the words that don't move the images, feelings, and thoughts forward. If you have trouble finding them, read the poem aloud. You'll hear the places it stumbles.

[*** Hey Jude***]

You My Friend have a most rare quality in your writing. You have always spoken the complete truth, which allows every emotion you experienced to be vividly felt.
This narrative belongs to be Number 1 on the Top Writing! Your experience's are remarkably genuine.
I have No Doubt that the Angels sing for you, and watch over you in time of respite. Thank you, as you cogitate we see a broader perspective through Coyote wisdom learned along your path. ~ Love, and Respect to You ~

[joshua deathdealer]

Great ending to surprising journey into the very core of love. Excellent work.

[Heather]

Cry tears for her, and for the writer, who lost such a beautiful love. I can feel the emotion in this. Thank you for sharing.

[Gothic Girl]

a great piece once again. so much emotion expressed beautifully.

[Crysta]

Beautiful.I could feel the wash of the sea, it's salty dank taste, the same taste you left soiled upon the girl as the emotion of her tears left her eyes. In the same way, do you think the angels tears rain on you with this same flavor?

[luvingu01]

what a beautiful way to describe a broken-relationship

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Love reading your work, so much life experience and wisdom. Thank you for sharing.

[Ruth]

There has always been a lesson throughout your poetry, be it political or emotional...that is why I love your writing so much :)
There are such lessons in life that until we reflect back on them, never seem to show us the errors of our ways, do they?
I wonder at times why we can't have the intuition to realise we are going through another lesson as it happens, to save more pain and anguish!
Guess we would not evolve if thats the case though...
Beautifully said love xoxo

[Tomi]

WOW! Another amazing write! Very very sad! Love is truly everything! Thank you for sharing :)

[poeticpiers]

Self forgiveness is extremely hard but we all make mistakes part of maturing I suppose.
You cannot change the past but you can change how you choose to act in thr future.
Ego te absolve