The Angels don't cry for me.

A very old poem. I learn you can't be forgiven. Just to live with the foolishness.

The Angels don' cry for me.

The kind Angels don't cry or pray for a man with no conscious.

They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy.

I sat by the Monterey Bay wishing to be somewhere else.

I was haunted by mistakes.

My greed for flesh and money had  left me alone and desperate.

The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.

I wished upon the first star.

For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.

Then I remembered I was the foolish man  who left her.

Left her with tears in her beautiful brown eyes.

Her haunting words are a part of me now." Please stay." If I left her.

No-one would ever love me again."

 I sat drowning in self pity and anger.

Wished a fool's dream.

To go back in time and hold on.

Angels don't forgive the cold and heartless men.

Men who drain young flesh and leave them for dead.

I found her once.

My brown eyed girl came to me.

She put her arms around me.

Whispered "I forgive you. Please take care of yourself."

She walked away with a true love hand in hand.

I saw she found joy in a man who knew he held a real diamond.

I drank my tequila alone and told the world to back off by the Seaside ocean.

I fell into the sea.

Trying to feel some kind of emotion.

I finally cried  tears for breaking a sweet woman heart.

I sat and waited for the sun to rise from the east.

Not knowing if a man could be forgiven for deeds done without heart or conscious?

I pray to the Gods of the sea, the sky and the earth for forgiveness.

I tossed the tequila down. I walked the cold and lonely beach.

The kind Angels are crying for me now.

They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love.

I sat by the sea wet,cold and understanding.

Love is the most beautiful and sweetest gift.

 When a sweet woman open up her heart and soul to you.

Hold on to her tightly.

Give long and sweet kisses.

Don't let go.

                                    Coyote

                                  Sept 1992

Author's Note

A re-write. I'm thankful for the help I received on this site. My writing had improved. Thank you kind writers.

Reviews

[UnendingOceans]

Rule 17: Omit needless words (from the Elements of Style by Strunk and White). I point this out because I think this would be a stronger poem if you remove the underbrush that serves no purpose. Get rid of the words that don't move the images, feelings, and thoughts forward. If you have trouble finding them, read the poem aloud. You'll hear the places it stumbles.

[SUGATA M]

'They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love'
'They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy'
'The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.
I wished upon the first star.
For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.'

I underlined the above lines with special attention. They carried the emotions already known to me.
Thank you for expressing some of my hidden emotions in this poem that I could have never brought out in my creations. Thank you.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

This is such a beautiful poem, and it spoke to me so deeply. Many people regretfully let go of someone who truly loves them, and always think of the things that could have been, and that which has come to pass instead. I think you portrayed that sensation with wonderful accuracy.

[Sahar moonlight]

Such an awesome poem full of emotions...
It leaves the reader attracted in every word.

Thanks for sharing!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think we all feel unworthy at times of love and forgiveness... a very heart wrenching poem that I could feel deep down.

[Kes]

This is a lovely poem. A bit sad, but very beautiful.
Great work!
K

[Barbara Walker]

They cry for you, once they know you have gained wisdom from your mistakes and gain it, you did. The biggest lessons carry the most losses. Human beings are rarely born wise.

[Renée]

Coyote this is a beautiful poem, a story really ...my heart holds more to say about it..but lately I seem to lack the ability to express myself ....Thank you for sharing this tender thought in writing !

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

This is quite lovely. Sad and remorseful, but with undertones of romance, sentimentality, and hope. Excellent job.

[Priscilla Sayers]

You honest vulnerability is treasured. The heart that went into this piece is one who seeks solace. One who has been through the sufferings of life and comes out with wisdom. Head held high, as Soldiers do....

[Star Wolf]

A very good and deeply emotional poem.