Broken Ground

Poem about the situation the world is in now.

Waves crash on the broken shore

Bringing back haunting memories

Childhood dreams once there,

Vanishing, carried by the sea-breeze

Hope vanished, love buried deep

Clouds carry raindrops like a teardrop,

Beautified and brought into nature

Do they ever think and stop?

Beasts aren't as cruel as man

Mankind deformed and defeated

Crashes and storms as lightning flashes

The broken camera of one who created

Gunshots, fires, men in green and brown

Camouflaged not only their bodies, but also souls

Dirt-stained souls, filled with evil

Leaving hearts behind, covered in holes

Beloved ones ripped away from home

Homes beaten to the blood-stained ground

Tell me now, if you can find the answer

Where in this world is love to be found?

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at a poem, please go easy on me and I need a lot of advice!
Flow and rhythm isn't great, but I focused more on my feelings and the message I wanted to convey than the actual symmetry. Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[zunie frost]

great work ... a sweet poem my friend

[Usman Muhammad]

Well written,
You have done far better than some good poets. If you continue like this you will do awesome.
I will be looking forward to read your other writings soon.

[Atewhs]

This is so aptly descriptive, and speaks of ur feelings as u said, in an enjoyable manner. Good work.

[Inject Positivity]

I think you did a very good job, as you have said it's your first try at poems so I think you did far greater than a reader could expect from a debutant... As for the poem it really shows the position of this modern world, a world that has been broken so many ways, with wars destruction everywhere... There is nothing left as love, all the happiness lost in a far away place...

Trust me you do have a lovely and honest view about this world and your poem says it perfectly... I hope you will keep on trying your hand at poetry...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Cass Morgan]

Aw, thank you so much! Your words mean a lot to me-- and I'll definitely keep writing! :-)

[WritingAnchor]

Love this! Sadly very true, great work!

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you very much! I appreciate you taking the time to read this!

[Arman]

great starting!
Clouds carry raindrops like a teardrop,
Beautified and brought into nature
Do they ever think and stop?
i liked it so much, or also i learned from it too!

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you so much for the review! Glad you liked it! :)

[WritingAnchor]

No problem! Would appreciate if you checked out my story as well! :)

[Nature]

Amazing. I really enjoyed it especially 2nd and 5th paras. You have nice observation skills. Congratulations.

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it, Miracles! :)

[Gee]

Hi,many good poets on here who we can all easily learn from.Really enjoyed the content although as you say the rhythm was a little off.Keep at it

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you so much for your review!

[Gee]

My pleasure.

[zunie frost]

I like the idea of your poetry !! Rhymes are great ! But they need a bit w0rk :-) other then that the poetry is awsome !!!
90 points fr0m me

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it!

[zunie frost]

was my pleasure !!!!
Please visit my profile w'll be greatfull

[MelissaAndres]

I would have never thought this was your first poem. You have done extremely well! I can imagine being inside your poem and experiencing what is going on. The sadness and anguish is quite intense. You have a great talent!

[Cass Morgan]

Thank you so much! I AM sad over what is happening in the world. The last sentence of this poem is a question I very often ask myself.

[MelissaAndres]

I admit it can be quite depressing and confusing but I try to remain positive and believe there are still good people in the world. I do, though, also believe that number is getting smaller and smaller.