If you were ever tossed around by someone, you know what I'm talking about.
Roaming around, no place to be Lost with no purpose to my being Keeping my emotions to myself Not a bother to anyone
Walking from spot to spot Always kicked out because I don't belong My hoodie hides me from the disappointed faces As I walk down the wet road of alone
No one wants to be with a loser like me Taken in because of the promise that's in me Soon left out to dry Once I am of no use anymore
Smacked around, kicked in the gut Pushed around in someone else's world Thrown away back into the wet road of alone Tripping on another person's idea of me
"My hoodie hides me from the disappointed faces
As I walk down the wet road of alone"
A sad poem. Sometime we feel alone and feel our life is meaningless. Just need to find something to excite our mind and heart. Can't make all people happy. must make yourself happy. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote
Love this. To me, the hoodie represents insecurety. Like the speaker of the poem is trying to hide themself from the world. I like the flow of the poem. It's very intense, sad, and strong, somehow. Very nice :)
This poem is so depressing.
I've been tossed around like this before, but if you have no hope that things can change, things won't change.
It's beautifully written, though. The way you used the 'wet road of alone' is clever.
Great write
xx
Nice job:-) Alone isn't a pleasure place, for certain. Bothers me to hear 'loser' though.... That last line is brilliant. No expectations, no regrets...something someone very dear once said to me... Just ride it out....smiling...
Posted 12 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Well, in this case, that's how this person feels about themselves. I'm sorry that the word loser mak.. read moreWell, in this case, that's how this person feels about themselves. I'm sorry that the word loser makes you uncomfortable, but I thought it was the appropriate word to convey this person's insecurities. Thank you for your helpful feedback.
9 Years Ago
I read my comment and saw it was two yrs ago :-) I feel quite differently at present. Time has al.. read moreI read my comment and saw it was two yrs ago :-) I feel quite differently at present. Time has allowed for some soul-searching. 'Alone' can be a very fulfilling time, just enjoying one's own company. I wonder if perhaps many of us are happy alone. Many need space;I know I do, and maybe that was God's plan all along. We grow up being taught that everyone needs a partner, and I just have resolved that simply isn't true for all of us. The last line of your work says it all. Maintain your own perception and be firm and steady in your course. It was a pleasure reading this one again... .Peace.
Being in those situations is what got me to kick everyone elses ideas out the window and be my own person that they adore but can never tell off or beat.
Posted 12 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Yeah I realize now that those moments made me stronger :) Thank you for your thoughts.
I really like this. The feeling of unmet expectations and the need to please leaving you used and alone. This is so sad, but you've done a really good job at building clear creative pictures of a feeling that could be simple at the first glace. You've released layers of complexity.
I haven't changed my "about me" section since I joined this website at least 5 years ago, so I think it's about time I changed it! Lot's of things have happened to me since then and I'm a completely d.. more..