Rain

It was raining earlier so I thought I would write about it.

Drip Drip Drip of a rain drop
Plop Plop Plop on my face
Puddles everywhere
On the cobble stone

Squish Squish Squish as I walk
Splash Splash Splash on my legs
Water coating everything
Purging my heart

I breathe out just to see steam
Come from my chapped lips
Feel God's tear drops
On my skin

Author's Note

Critique if you like :)

Reviews

[Michael X]

the requim of a refreshing sense newness, the play on wording is vibrant
and draws the poem to an artisitc realm of expression, emotive and creative.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you! :)

[no sun]

Beautifully written. Just an amazing write! I enjoyed the concept and your use of rain/tears.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your kind review :)

[Maryam]

It's simple, yet absolutely amazing! Well done!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[Amberway]

I loved this! It was so surreal. It put a perfect picture in your head from the description. I loved the word choice you used also.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your helpful feedback!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Beautiful!!!!! I love the use of raion as a cleansing tool instead of just a symbol for sorrow!! I love this!!!!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you! The funny thing is that I really don't like the rain now a couple years later :P Amazing how much things can change huh?

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Lol:) yeah it is

[♥ Kinnixk]

I enjoyed reading this. Lightly written and beautiful :)

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you! :)

[Whiskurz]

Very well written.....I enjoyed.....Whisk

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you.

[...and some ideas.]

NOT BAD...LITE AND FAST...YOU SURVIVED IT..IT SEEMS :)

[Heromen Selena]

Haha I'm not really sure what that means but thank you for reading :)

[MOON]

Lovely write , something about rain cleansing!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)