I Can't Give What You want

This is to my ex, even though he'll probably not read it. My emotions are just so annoying that this is the only way I can truly convey how exactly I feel about him.

It was fun, really
We had laughs, jokes
A week past, fly-by
My feelings were mixed

I like you as a friend
Loved you like a brother
I tried to talk to you
But you mistook what I said

Letters keep arriving at my locker
My mood dampens when I see
These proclamations of your love
Because I know that it's wasted

I received one today
It was sweet, no doubt
You told me I gave you hope
And you think about me constantly

You believe that you will be
Forever single because of me
That I've stolen your heart
When I didn't even want it

Please leave me be
I can't fake my feelings
It's a craft that few people possess
But it never works out right

My heart does not yearn for you
Though yours does for me
Get over me already
For I can't give what you want from me

Author's Note

Critique Away!!! Fixed the last line :)

Reviews

[Monica]

I like it! You are honest, direct, and strong. He has to get the point, and he will, sooner or later. I had this problem once...except instead of notes, he would sit on my porch and wait for me. I was very direct and strong with my words...he flew away and landed on someone else's porch :)

[Heromen Selena]

Oh good! :) I'm glad it worked out for you.

[Darian B.]

I think there are things both people in this situation need to keep in mind but they both concern the difference between a crush and legitimate love. If the guy really loves you, he will stop pushing for something more and "settle" for just being the best friend he can be. He will still go out of his way for you when you want it because that's true love, helping you knowing that he gets nothing out of it except the comfort on your face when he really does help. The person who does not love him in that way (in this situation you but this is 4 years ago so I hope it doesn't still apply) should remember that if he really does love you, he will always try to be there for you out of pure love for you and that does not mean he is still trying to get with you. That being said, if you care about him at all, you will tell him that you only want to be his friend and you do care about him... as a friend (essentially friend zoning in a legitimately caring way) and if he cares about you, he will try to be where you want him to be in your life (be that leaving you alone or talking to you often) while not putting away his life to do so.

Anyway, that's my rant for the day. Perhaps it is obvious, but I think people too often villainize one person or the other in this situation and don't try to figure out a way for a real friendship to exist when it's very possible if both people care about each other (as friends or otherwise). I like the poem though. I think that these things take time and I hope you both are well off

[Heromen Selena]

Woah not going to lie I did not expect to see a review like this today, especially from something from so long ago. As you said earlier, this was written 4 years ago and I have change and so has the person whom this person is about. I also think that people always think there's a right and wrong side to a relationship. I wasn't trying to insinuate that here. This was more about me feeling guilty then viewing myself as the bad guy. I felt bad because he clearly wanted something different then what I wanted, and I know that's okay and healthy but that doesn't stop the guilt, you know? Well regardless, it was a long time ago and it doesn't apply to my life currently. Him and I are sort of friends now. He didn't take the let down well so he needed time to himself. We don't talk just us anymore, but we get along well enough in events our mutual friends attend and don't shy away from direct conversations. We're just different.

Thank you for your valuable input and I'm glad you like the poem even though you had a strong adverse reaction to the subject! I hope you are well off as well.

[Ian Faraway]

Wait, if this was for your ex then wouldn't that mean you did give him what he wanted from you? Well regardless, I absolutely loved this poem. Definitely not a view point on unrequited love that's often written about either. You painted the images very well. As Monica said, it was very direct and strong. Keep writing!

[Heromen Selena]

Without going into much detail, basically he asked if I wanted to go out with him and I said yes. He took that answer differently than I did and automatically called us boyfriend and girlfriend when I just wanted to get to know him more. So technically he is my ex. If you want me to explain it more you can also email me. Thank you for reading and I'm glad you liked it.

[Heromen Selena]

I never loved him that's what I couldn't give to him, my heart.

[Ian Faraway]

Oh, I see. That's definitely a difficult thing to go through.

[Rhea752]

wow. LOVE!!!!!!!!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I know exactly what you mean when you write this!! The last two stanzas are the ones I relate to the most. The whole piece is beautiful and quite a good way to capture what you want to say, even if he doesn't look at it. Beautiful!!!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you so much! :)

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so much heart break but its amazing! i love this! amazing...

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your review

[Amberway]

This was interesting. Defiantly put in understandable words what you were trying to get across. I liked it!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you!!!!

[Xhiljola]

these situations suck...but nice write...thank u for sharing

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for the kind review

[Rose of Gondor]

I hate it when this sort of thing happens. I just can't tell anyone "no". I don't want to hurt them...

This is direct and straightforward. I hope this problem is resolved soon and that no one gets hurt in the process!

[Heromen Selena]

Yeah it does suck :/ Thank you for your review!

[THE-NAMELESS]

i like your honesty, you didnt lead him on and told him straight out the truth, i wish everyone were always truthful. i like the last stanza especially its really good

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your thoughts :)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

A little twist in this kind work..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Sunflower/Sara

[Heromen Selena]

I'm glad you chose this one too :) Thank you for reading

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Okay.....Sara