My Own Coffin

I just feel sucky today. Thought if I was going to feel bad, might as well put it in writing.

You didn't mean it, I know
It was an accident, You know
I curl up in bed, Plagued by you
Cry myself to slumber, I dream of you

On the hill top, There you are
In the green grass, So very far
I climb the slope, Making my way
Let the sun shine, Show me the way

I reach your open arms, Wrap around me tightly
You feel like heaven, Forever with me lovingly
The clouds shadow the light, A hole swallows you up
She's down there grinning, You drink from the poison cup

I step back into reality, Drenched in tears
Shaking under the covers, From the night terrors
I look myself in the mirror, As I do often
And think to myself, I'm making my own coffin

A hole where you are is in my heart
Keeping you safe until you climb out and meet me
Digging in deeper for how long you stay in
Reach out and take my hand,

For there's nothing for you there

Author's Note

Critique as much as you want. I will embrace it with open arms.

Reviews

[Pyrrha Rayn]

That was very deep and moving. I appreciate the raw emotion you enduced with this writing. You take simple everyday emotions and turn them into these beautifully crafted works of art. At one point I confused myself but I got it :) Nothing you did you are a very talented writing. Thank you for such excellent writing

[Pikachu]

Oh my. This is just so amazing! *.*

I love this:

"
I step back into reality, Drenched in tears
Shaking under the covers, From the night terrors
I look myself in the mirror, As I do often
And think to myself, I'm making my own coffin"

Lovely. c:

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Wow the first stanza is nearly perfect! You have a lot of potential as a writer I feel.

1. I curl up in bed, Plagued by you
Cry myself to slumber, I dream of you

[THE-NAMELESS]

this is another great write, keep up the good work

[CrimsonBlaze]

Woah! Woah! Woah! -double facepalm combo-
This was amazing
-slaps face again-
Youre really good at poems like these. And i have to say that I will be looking forward to more. Keep it up!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Hauntingly beautiful!!! I love this poem. The imagery is quite realistic! Wonderful write!!!

[EMMIE]

Yes you definitely paint a vivid picture. Very creative.

[PolaroidRaid]

Very nice description and imagery. I enjoyed reading this piece. :)

[Heromen Selena]

Thanks guys :) Reading these reviews made my day better.

[MOON]

I like the imagery and your way with words .

[Maryam]

Very well written and a good read. Great job!